Sonnet № 49548
Symbol Of Love
Father weeps and mother cries
As a newborn baby closes her eyes
Nobody knows why she's gone
Her mother and father's hearts are torn
Doctor said he did all he coulda
Father says maybe I shoulda
But mother only lays silent and sad
Knowing things have never been this bad
People come to show dismay
Hold their hand and have their say
It's for the best they will hear
Even when the tears are near
So they say goodbye to their symbol of love
As their baby moves on to god above
Now all that they felt was their gladness
Is turned entirely to heartache and sadness
And now the time has come to mourn
Although their baby was just born
But in years to come when they look above
That star they see will be their symbol of love.
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By the way, simone: great use of "sadness" to rhyme with "gladness"!
1) You could care less what horus8 thinks of your poetry.
2) There is a possible amount of caring lower than the amount you have. (1)
3) You could not care less than not caring at all.
4) There is no possible amount of caring lower than not caring at all (having zero care). (3)
5) The amount you care does not equal zero. (2,4)
6) You care what horus8 thinks of your poetry. (5)
miss/mrs/ms/mr/doctor/lord/lady etc etc etc girard, if you put poems onto this site it is for them to be criticised. If somebody says it's shit then it means they don't like you. If everybody says its shit then it means its shit. Learn from this. Try to listen to what the other tits on here say. Sometimes they'll say something useful.
1) Please stop rhyming love with above, you've done it twice in this poem and in all the others of yours that I've bothered to read, the fact that I bothered to read them says something in itself, namely that I can't belive that they are all going to be exactly the same. Unfortunately they are.
2) Quit with the sonnets, it pisses people off when people try to do something clever. No, it pisses people off when others try to do something clever but fail miserably.
Having said this I must also add:
Shardik you are a twat. Don't bring paedophilia into this. There are plenty more 'poets' who do that on here and it's too sick even for me. Hey but before I go you should check out the dead baby joke website.
Q: What's more fun than swinging a baby round on a clothes line at 200 kph?
A: Stopping it with a shovel.
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