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Symbol Of Love (Sonnet) by simone_girard

Father weeps and mother cries As a newborn baby closes her eyes Nobody knows why she's gone Her mother and father's hearts are torn Doctor said he did all he coulda Father says maybe I shoulda But mother only lays silent and sad Knowing things have never been this bad People come to show dismay Hold their hand and have their say It's for the best they will hear Even when the tears are near So they say goodbye to their symbol of love As their baby moves on to god above Now all that they felt was their gladness Is turned entirely to heartache and sadness And now the time has come to mourn Although their baby was just born But in years to come when they look above That star they see will be their symbol of love.

Katzclear 2-Nov-03/12:03 PM
You did a really good job on this poem. in my opinion poetry is not about making it rhyme, or making enough syllables... or enough lines.. or whatever. It's like what you did, making a statement and evoking an emotion. 10/10




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