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Just One More Time (Free verse) by KatieKaBoom I'm sure I heard it breathing softly
nestled in a sigh
I thought I felt it on my skin
then dreamed it was a lie
But now I'm blocking out the sun
while clinging to the burn
just to hear it one more time
I need another turn
Up the ladder:
Awakening
Down the ladder:
MY LOVE FOR YOU
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.7
Posted: June 17, 2002 7:59 PM PDT; Last modified: June 17, 2002 7:59 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.85 Overall Rank: 10589 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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11-Jul-02/12:30 AM
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Keep going??
I wanted it rare, bring me another.
oh! the last line is too weak. the rest of it is great, though.
Is this a sex poem? about getting a rash? poison ivy?
I should smite your face with a mighty cudgel for such a terrible poem. However as you remind me of the Katie to whose memory I still cling, like a pair of pants to an old man's crotch, I award you a fairly indifferent -7-
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