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nanana (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation Shifting creases barricade a sweet,
cohesive form
And unannounced, allies renounce
in grunts and shouts
"We've found our war."
And train their sons and daughters
properly.
Point A must always meet point B
unless a line divides a means.
Gods and kings alike have seen
geometric anomalies.
But blindness became optional.
So soft stays soft,
but hard hangs aloft
in a rarely realized realm.
This is where shapes coagulate
and forge a frame to surround
the obvious.
A safe place where faces fade
with the static collection of dust.
"But I said, but i said
what were the parameters? You left them
undefined. And hence the confusion."
"oh. So sorry to keep you hanging. You had
something to say, so spit it out."
"Um, when I first slipped in I felt my resolve
weakening. So, what's the slippery coating?"
You try you cha-rye you triangulate coordinates
into an arbitrary archetype.
And that's why you slide so easily.
Up the ladder:
it's a new crayon
Down the ladder:
Internal Dialogue (Mental Cock-Slapping & Anal Discipline)
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Posted: June 18, 2004 1:29 AM PDT; Last modified: June 18, 2004 1:29 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9103527 Overall Rank: 9679 Comments:
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Would you say that, like poetry, math is a subject which pretty much everybody is equally qualified to talk about, that there are no right or wrong answers in math?
Besides, math is the most narrow-minded thing ever. You can't just go around prattling math-sounding nonsense like 'Point A must always meet point B unless a line divides a means' like you would with poetry-sounding nonsense. Point A almost never 'meets' point B. A line 'dividing the means,' whatever that means, has nothing to do with whether the two points 'meet'. That's not being narrow-minded any more than insisting 2 + 2 = 4 (instead of, say, 'purple') is narrow-minded. Please, get a life and stop writing about math. Thanks.
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Therefore, points A and B do not always meet. In fact, the only way I can imagine two points 'meeting' is if they are the same point (in which case, a line couldn't 'divide' them).
I'm not trying to be some lunatic math bigot; it's just that you seem to have thought it would be cool and smart-sounding to throw some math-talk into your poem without considering how most mathy expressions (such as 'always') have very precise definitions. If you're going to play math games in your poems, you have to do it right, else your poem will be wrong and sound like crap to most sensible people, whatever else you've put in it. This is not arguable, no returns times infinity.
-Q.E.D.-
For once in my life, I would say somebody dug too deep into what I was inferring in my poem. I was merely writing about an origin and a destination. I just tossed in the nonsensical math bit about point a meeting point b bla bla bla to demonstrate how ignorant the motivations for avoiding progress often are, at least in my observation of older people close to me. These people always try to sputter off mathematical or scientific facts that make absolutely no sense to support lofty claims of their own. so maybe you didn't dig too deep, you just didn't realize the portion discussing math was supposed to be another voice. as you can see, the speaker of the poem is having dialogue with someone else, there aren't always quotations because some of it is stream-of-conscience. As for my earlier comment about "discriminitive and narrow-minded?" a bit of irony on your own part, i was jokingly taking offense to your comment and you bit the bait.