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nanana (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation

Shifting creases barricade a sweet, cohesive form And unannounced, allies renounce in grunts and shouts "We've found our war." And train their sons and daughters properly. Point A must always meet point B unless a line divides a means. Gods and kings alike have seen geometric anomalies. But blindness became optional. So soft stays soft, but hard hangs aloft in a rarely realized realm. This is where shapes coagulate and forge a frame to surround the obvious. A safe place where faces fade with the static collection of dust. "But I said, but i said what were the parameters? You left them undefined. And hence the confusion." "oh. So sorry to keep you hanging. You had something to say, so spit it out." "Um, when I first slipped in I felt my resolve weakening. So, what's the slippery coating?" You try you cha-rye you triangulate coordinates into an arbitrary archetype. And that's why you slide so easily.

FreeFormFixation 20-Jun-04/12:22 PM
Quod Erat Demonstrandum?
For once in my life, I would say somebody dug too deep into what I was inferring in my poem. I was merely writing about an origin and a destination. I just tossed in the nonsensical math bit about point a meeting point b bla bla bla to demonstrate how ignorant the motivations for avoiding progress often are, at least in my observation of older people close to me. These people always try to sputter off mathematical or scientific facts that make absolutely no sense to support lofty claims of their own. so maybe you didn't dig too deep, you just didn't realize the portion discussing math was supposed to be another voice. as you can see, the speaker of the poem is having dialogue with someone else, there aren't always quotations because some of it is stream-of-conscience. As for my earlier comment about "discriminitive and narrow-minded?" a bit of irony on your own part, i was jokingly taking offense to your comment and you bit the bait.




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