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nanana (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation

Shifting creases barricade a sweet, cohesive form And unannounced, allies renounce in grunts and shouts "We've found our war." And train their sons and daughters properly. Point A must always meet point B unless a line divides a means. Gods and kings alike have seen geometric anomalies. But blindness became optional. So soft stays soft, but hard hangs aloft in a rarely realized realm. This is where shapes coagulate and forge a frame to surround the obvious. A safe place where faces fade with the static collection of dust. "But I said, but i said what were the parameters? You left them undefined. And hence the confusion." "oh. So sorry to keep you hanging. You had something to say, so spit it out." "Um, when I first slipped in I felt my resolve weakening. So, what's the slippery coating?" You try you cha-rye you triangulate coordinates into an arbitrary archetype. And that's why you slide so easily.

zodiac 19-Jun-04/12:45 PM
PS-Here is an example of a point A and point B which don't 'meet':

.A

.B

Therefore, points A and B do not always meet. In fact, the only way I can imagine two points 'meeting' is if they are the same point (in which case, a line couldn't 'divide' them).

I'm not trying to be some lunatic math bigot; it's just that you seem to have thought it would be cool and smart-sounding to throw some math-talk into your poem without considering how most mathy expressions (such as 'always') have very precise definitions. If you're going to play math games in your poems, you have to do it right, else your poem will be wrong and sound like crap to most sensible people, whatever else you've put in it. This is not arguable, no returns times infinity.

-Q.E.D.-




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