Re: The Longest Wait (Revised) by Caducus	5-Aug-03/7:34 PM
But seriously now. By hearing you whine as swine the other day I have started to figure that you just don't get it, and then to hear from the snipped brother that you are not fond of the rewrite was just another in a long line of many examples where you work suffers. In this piece, it is trying to mix a simple setting with overbearing themes dealing with the almighty FATE and TIME. Can't you figure out a way to simply these concepts into images? Because when you say things like "FATE is a flat line. la de da" it sounds, well, just hokey. And then you throw goofy rhyme schemes into the picture and you have a true piece of comic genius. Then the fact that people fall for the crap shows why we are continually failing as the human race. A subject like this is so fragile and the line is so fine when you are dealing with it that there is little room for generalizing. Everything has to be specific, even if you have to throw out wild images like an embalmer calling at 3am. It works on that level. It does not here because anyone who has gone through this knows that there is a bereavement period after the death and in most cases a huge amount of relief and sadness thrown into the picture. It is not like they just kick you out and bring in a new patient. There is paper work; there are phone calls. There is usually an unbearable silence. Everyone knows that the monitor is long gone in the situation you are talking about so most likely the only way you would know someone dead is by the breathing and that is even tough, This situation isn't the ER. I feel like you showed up for the show and when the movie was over simply went home and wrote a bad poem. Where are the guts? I think you will find that in simplifying the language and the context of what you are saying you will have more sucess. Finding precise images in each line and not one's that everyone is familiar with because the watch too much TV.
Re: a comment on I, criminal by INTRANSIT	4-Aug-03/4:03 PM
Huh? What? Huh?
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	4-Aug-03/4:00 PM
Two words do not make a drunk. FUCKER! Purely in the Eels sense, though.
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	4-Aug-03/3:59 PM
I am not sure obsolete is the right word, Cad. Pointless I will buy, especially since hat hare gave me the vegan rake over so many years back. I was trying to write in the vain of Ogden Nash. Yes, I failed. A paper airplane it is. Hooray!!!
Re: a comment on Witness to a Murder by poetandknowit	4-Aug-03/3:41 PM
Why is that?
Re: a comment on Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/3:16 PM
Not likely. Bye now.
Re: a comment on Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/3:14 PM
Yes, I constantly have to prove my masculinity to be accepted in the DL. Besides, it was first in the most recent poems and rutting for Z has become quite the yearly pasttime. I am not sure the irony comes through, but good try. Intransit always slobbers - cars and women don't ya know. And now Hour8 (or who). Image in a purely poetic sense. I am sure you have quite the glossy airbrushed image in West Hollywood. It is a pretty city filled with pretty people. I was just there for the dead. Santa Barbara, Malibu. Lovely places. Lovely people. Lots of marble. Yes, sir. Sure beats looking at the fat chaps and lasses in Misery. Take a drink now. I am going to ride.
Re: a comment on Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:56 PM
I commented on poems you posted in the same fashion you comment on others. It is not my fault that they are crap. I did mention the paper airplane. Obviously any sort of professional criticism would go by the wayside. So, I'd rather do this - at least for the next 10 minutes. Oh yes: lol.
Re: a comment on Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:51 PM
Sure thing, Brad. No, it simply explains the mind boggling fact that despite your will, your ego (hahahahaha) and your ability to scribble words while high, and your endless capacity to convince yourself that you are a true talent, your work suffers. And you cannot take criticism worth a shit. You automatically go into defense mode and hide behind your plethora of characters at the drop of a word.. Your work suffers. And the fact is you are a joke of a writer. No matter how much you want to talk the talk, no matter how much you berate what you consider lesser talent (which is quite funny, actually), no matter how many times we get to see Intransit slobber over you, the fact remains is that your writing is all over the place and in need of a good edit. But you cannot see that. And your defenses make you sound foolish. You are Image challenged. Laughable.
Re: a comment on Satyrs and fluting the teachers by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:35 PM
An old friend who wandered off that way. We believe he might have had a stunning run in gay porn. However, that would require more research than I am up for at present. Literally. So, if you see him, please drop him my regards. That would be ever so kind. You guys might hit is off.
Re: a comment on Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:29 PM
You must be smoking his cancer ridden ashes. That explains everything. No wonder. Sorry.
Re: a comment on Satyrs and fluting the teachers by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:23 PM
You think so slowly you constantly double comment. Think things through before you waste space. At least keep it confined to one box. Sorry, no referrals. I would have to tell the truth. It may hurt your budding career in the porn industry. If you see Alex Graham, please do say hello.
Re: Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:20 PM
Sometimes words stung together are simply words strung together. Why is it we must see every bad idea that comes to you when you are high? Your writing is going nowhere. Stan Rice is DEAD!
Re: I, criminal by INTRANSIT	4-Aug-03/2:15 PM
Ding, dang darn: this still lacks the almighty possession. And don't quit your day job.
Re: Satyrs and fluting the teachers by Jeremi B. Handrinos	4-Aug-03/2:13 PM
Maybe this should have been a paper airplane.
Re: a comment on Upon a falling bar stool (Free for all) by PluckyHoe by horus8	3-Aug-03/9:59 PM
You always did write more poetry than I did. I jot down what I can when I can and hope to find time to work it into something worthwhile. I am not (nor have ever been) a prolific poet. I am just a good one.
Re: a comment on Upon a falling bar stool (Free for all) by PluckyHoe by horus8	3-Aug-03/9:28 PM
I am not upset. I truly mean it when I say Mr. JBH/JHB is father of the year material. I sent in his nomination to President Bush's "I-love-my-big-daddy" campaign just yesterday. He is a kind and loving citizen and parent, and teaches he wee lad that hard work and incessant cigarette smoking will get you through just about any situation in Hollywood (the toughest town in show business). I am proud of his success, and I, for one, wish to declare this Jeremy Britt day. How about you Thom? Where is your spirit for your fellow man. You are a war hero. Mr. Hours8 battles everyday just to pay the bills. He sucks a bit of dick to make sure the rent is paid on time (high California rents, you know), he constantly battle the temptations of Ornella Muti and her Bulgarian sway. He is a true everyday warrior. And I love him!
Re: a comment on Upon a falling bar stool (Free for all) by PluckyHoe by horus8	3-Aug-03/7:56 PM
Sure you are.
Re: a comment on Upon a falling bar stool (Free for all) by PluckyHoe by horus8	3-Aug-03/7:49 PM
Hey now, do not forget father of the year and budding soft core porn star.
Re: a comment on Lethal Weapon by poetandkonwit	3-Aug-03/12:14 PM
Was I talking to you? Are you Matt?