regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/7:26 PM
Sorry anagram, a bad poem is a bad poem, and this is quite terrible. I have encountered numerous younger poets who have merit, but they look beyond there own hormonal difficulties.
Re: father Worked Nights by poetandknowit	27-Aug-02/10:43 PM
Swishy24 I am so sorry I criticized your work of genius and forced you to take your poem of the site and run and tell mother. However, it sucked. I cannot change the way I feel, and I think what I said about the poem was extremely constructive and poignant. See, I am not fighting my hormones and contemplating suicide at every step so I can write deep dark sentimental poor me sap. My poems involve skill that you would not even begin to understand because you are still reading Judy Blume and Harry Potter books. Hone your skills in puberty and then come back and post. I am tired of reading crap. And one last note: I did not give you a 0. It was not worth rating by number in my opinion. Someone else must love your work also. As for Anotherday, shut up if you do not post. Get some thick skin. "Oh poetry is about sharing and caring and expressing your soul" Please, start reading serious poets and quit wasting our time.
Re: Disillusioned & Confused by Sigh'ense...	27-Aug-02/10:53 PM
This poem, excuse me lyric, has some seriously confused images and lines. And some lines I actually like. Poisonous curriculum is good, but what exactly is "cerebral tuberculosis?" Plus, I get the feeling you sat down with a thesaurus and plagued the poem, excuse me again, lyric, with unneeded syllables.
Re: Tryst by <~>	27-Aug-02/11:02 PM
Hmmm. I was always taught that if you are too close to it, save it for later to avoid the dramatic sentiment. But this, writer of triangle poems, is interesting. I agree with GW. I laughed a bit on first reading. But I think it was the general rhyme scheme. I think somewhere in our head we are programmed to think limericks as being funny. The only thing that confused me on the first couple of reads is the land images mixing with water images, but that could be questioning if this is something grounded or skirting. Who knows? Reading too much into it, I suppose.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/11:26 PM
This poem goes absolutely nowhere. It sounds like a little prose ditty and no it is not interesting.
Re: Colours by unknown	27-Aug-02/11:29 PM
So your are saying Asians, who generally have an olive tint to the skin which many construe as being yellowish, are cowards and racists?
Re: Be My Girl by disturbedone182	28-Aug-02/12:25 PM
Wow! This is simple and to the point. Hell, I'll be your bitch. Do you speak Emotion instead of English also?
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/2:44 PM
Again, case in point, if I am so far beneath you, which is probably true since I don't speak Emotion as a second language (LOL, that will always crack me up) then maybe that is a good thing because I work my serious poems to death. Therefore, they are good, and this poem above, although it has a nice first line, as I mentioned in the deleted comment, turns into "simplistic" drivel. The sentiment is nice, but the images do not capture any sort of "emotion" as you hope to convey. It is lost in relatively "simplistic" imagery that most of us who are well read have heard or seen a thousand times before. I also suggested that with a bit of "labor" you might salvage the poem. Make it better and more readable to just you and you husband. So, in conclusion, I saw nothing out of place in the comment that would cause you to use an emotive phrase like "sooooooooo beneath me." I was just trying to help you become a better writer. Anyone can say they are an artist. However, it is best to back it up. And in language, you have not done that. I have.
Re: School by shwenatjadeflower	28-Aug-02/2:46 PM
So how do kids get grounded these days?
Re: Walls by razorgrin	28-Aug-02/3:03 PM
This could definitely be tightened. Drop some of the articles, let the real rhythm out, and change the passive to active. Make it happen as we read it. "Outside, wind blows cold, whipping faces and making knuckles ache. Dark hangs like a heavy blanket over our town." And so on. I still cannot figure out if I like the rest of the poem, but I am trying.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/3:09 PM
Big Doilie, you know you love cartland. She is the Brits' best selling author. Come on admit it. You eat your prunes and pudding while reading it and you have read all 60 thousand of her books. Come on. Fess up, ye.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/4:34 PM
Yes, a true artist would never labor over anything; it is beneath your god given talent. Let the work stand, it is genius. All your emotive work is probable shear genius captured directly from the muse. Go now, with your happy thoughts (because you an a true artist - metal and clay, metal and clay, heh: it rhymes it is simple, it is art) and speak with your hubby in the language of Emotion. So long, farewell. Another artist we lose from poemranker.
Re: A-Team #2 by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/10:27 PM
razorgirl this bojangle fellow could write a whole page of semi colons and it would rock your sock, which I hope do not smell. But unfortunately the haiku tribute to bad TV gives me gas..
Re: Incidentally, you might want to look up 'Amplexus' by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/10:33 PM
Hopefully she was over the toilet. Let see? I have not used stupid in awhile. Weak comedy. Yes, that should do.
Re: no pretty words by silvertongueddevil	28-Aug-02/10:36 PM
I do not necessarily like the first stanza, but I like the poem. good stuff.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/9:12 AM
Oh, yes we must give credit where credit it due. Me thought the keybored so clever I just had to mock it along with all the angst suicide poems. The more your life fades into a virtual state and you spend here among the cyber literary culture, the more this poem sheds its profundities.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/3:38 PM
Of course it is yours you nit wit and the suicide poems are the 182 kids and of course, we all know who hunt and peck belongs to, or at least those of us who read from the random file do. You should be so proud of coming up with such a thing so I could mock it profusely at one in the morning on a Wednesday. Would you like me to put a footnote at the poem's bottom claiming my thievery? There are many profundities in here; it is just for the weaker poets to discover.
Re: Incidentally, you might want to look up 'Amplexus' by Shin-Bojangles	29-Aug-02/3:46 PM
I have seem many LIMERICKS, as you like to refer to them as, posted on this site which made me guffaw with pleasure, unfortunately this was child's play. I did not laugh, I did not cry I just sat there and wondered why his girly thinks it classic when it is nothing more than shite.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/4:01 PM
Do you begin all of your poems with an indirect article? Is that the new style? Minus that oddity, this poem expressed universal emotions that everyone goes through. I cried. I truly cried over my keybored.
Re: Cancer Haikus by poetandknowit	29-Aug-02/4:10 PM
and leave out West Nile?