Re: Free by muffin	24-Oct-02/8:17 PM
"Her translation is in her eyes" the rest must go.
Re: Why Did God Do This To Me? by TripleHGurl	24-Oct-02/8:14 PM
Eureka it seems I have found the center of the universe. Pre-schoolers believe God revolves around them.
Re: Fields of Deception by rick	24-Oct-02/8:10 PM
The last stanza is too obscure. So is everything else. I think I know what your talking about only because you're so vague you could be talking about a lot of things. Including my own personal belief. You sound of restraint, not hollow, but not hallowed. Make sense?
Re: a comment on Shackles of Reality by rick	24-Oct-02/7:55 PM
You must come from a long, long line, and by that I mean a romantic flaw. Relative yes. A son perhaps, left at the doorstep. Cathedral or E.R., it's all the same. Emergencies.
Re: Shackles of Reality by rick	24-Oct-02/5:35 PM
Well rick, 4 0's thus far. What you're saying is not news, nor how you go about saying it, novel. In fact, your philosophy is out-of-date and no longer true. Didn't you see Titanic? Mr Cameron's heroes learn their lesson's just for you. There is no reality. Nothing is motionless. The future does not exist. this poem is a relic from a time when humans believed in fate. You must be very young.
Re: From a letter (never sent) by UnityMitford	23-Oct-02/8:18 AM
Alright who is Unity?
Re: a comment on Truths by Nicholas Jones	23-Oct-02/7:56 AM
Yeah, you just keep convincing yourself of that. The average car costs $30,000 but I can still by a head of lettuce for $.69, gee I wonder how that works out. 100's of billions of dollars dedicated to instruments of war, but little angel maria can't go to school cause there's not enough room. They've shut down more then 50% of the county clinics here, and a doctors visit cost $90.00. Fuck you, I'm praying for the day the economy collapses.
Re: futile existence by chinstrap	23-Oct-02/7:47 AM
Try a McVities Chocolate Digestive. Their super!
Re: a comment on Stockport by Nicholas Jones	23-Oct-02/7:39 AM
I know a biscuit is a cookie, What I don't understand is why you would refer to them as something as unappetizing as a 'digestive'. It was explained to me yesterday. I just keep picturing some bloated guy munching on a choc. disc. I think it's a good idea. It's difficult to get people to eat their vegetables. They sell them at a place called Trader Joe's but I don't remember the packaging carrying the word digestive.
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/2:11 PM
*<;o) I am a winking clown with a big red nose!
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/1:41 PM
Sorry, I'll get it right next time. *<;o) I'm a winking clown with a big red nose!
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/1:29 PM
Yes maria, I think your personal problem is the worst one here at poemranker so far, with the exclusion of -=Dark_Angel's=- ( does the 's come before or after your left-wing?) but at least yours has a solution.
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/1:19 PM
It which case, would maria rank at the top of the best or the worst list?
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/1:06 PM
We need to talk, I'm going to e-mail you right now.
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/12:59 PM
On your own the only way you can work out hte trauma is by re-creating it! It's a fact. You are in a very fragile and dangerous state of mind. You need guidance getting through it. you should be talking with girls who have been through what you've been through. You don't need your parents approval, your 14 go to a support group on your own. Start there. Just do it once, to prove I'm wrong.
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/12:56 PM
YOU CAN'T. YOU CANNOT. IT'S IMPOSSIBLE!
Re: a comment on America by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/12:48 PM
We do more then be horrible, we're bloody honest and we try to be objective. Please, please, please seek some counselling for what happened to you. Don't fuck -up an entire decade of your life like I did. I wish you the best.
Re: requiem for an ex-girlfriend by natalie	22-Oct-02/10:56 AM
Very fine, the ending is strong, I like that.
Re: a comment on Comfort Food by jessicazee	22-Oct-02/10:51 AM
I was just teasing. Good poem. Gnocchi is my favorite comfort food and seem to fit your them, lovely little pillows that they are. Yuo couldn't possibly list them all.
Re: Daniela by little_angel_maria	22-Oct-02/10:47 AM
"said my personal life"? What is that? ".. the fact of what..." terrible. "I treated you" to lunch, kind, what? Fix your errors. If you weren't such a brat, and could listen to critism without having a fit, maybe you would learn something. I sympathize with your situation, I was raped at 13 and then fell into many abusive relationships with older men because of it, but that's no excuse for bad grammer. Now stop whining and open your eyes to the fact that your writing, at this point, needs serious coaching. I think you just need to give yourself a few years before you start posting this stuff. Write all you want, keep it somewhere and then come back to it and make something beautiful out of it, this is tripe. I also suggest you move to an area with better schools if you can. Here in the states they have a victims relocation program, you shouldn't have to go to the same school you were going to before this happened. I'm assumng you're still in school. Does everyone in your neighborhood know this happened to you? Get some counselling, before you start acting out like I did. Poemranker is not an appropriate place for you to be discussing this shit right now.