| Re: Rockmage, I was going to pay him... by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
14-Nov-03/9:44 PM |
look at dreamersupreme- none of my poems on him have a score higher than 5 (cept maybe one, or two)
shit happens? nutcrunch time?
(and what about that lump of coal? maybe im being paranoid)
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| Re: Good Riddance by dragonfly |
14-Nov-03/9:57 PM |
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22-Nov-03/7:02 PM |
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Posted because? Felt like it.
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| Re: A "sirius"makeover by The_Third_Isis |
23-Nov-03/7:01 AM |
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looks like your family has a potent poet gene. Overall, blessed with eight.
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| Re: The drug prayer by Nitroxide |
23-Nov-03/3:58 PM |
amt, 5meodipt, dpt? salvia? try those, very nice stuff.
heres a nine.
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| Re: The drug prayer by Nitroxide |
23-Nov-03/4:02 PM |
micro sized version of poem:
Ive been a stoned fool
for six years
and counting
Hooked, a goner
with a pen- but
smugly famous
after ultra-od
and my poetry discoverd
under the porch by my lucky joint.
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23-Nov-03/4:04 PM |
goddamn it- she was lesbian? j/k
rejoice in the sacred eight bestowed unto you.
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| Re: Come home by phbiscuit |
24-Nov-03/11:21 PM |
Isolation didn't make me happy. Leaving my house and strolling in san fran for 5 days did wonders though.
Blessed with seven.
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| Re: Revolution by Nitroxide |
25-Nov-03/11:49 AM |
I said the same thing when I was thirteen? And realized that it's much more complicated than that.
blessed with 6.
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25-Nov-03/11:55 AM |
sickle & red eye.. quite a read- calm yet billowy, with well placed meaning. Yup, its a winner alright.
Blessed with 10.
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25-Nov-03/12:08 PM |
I've been reminded of my bathtub submarine. Not bad, though as a lyric- I think it would sound odd being sung. Course, I don't know shit about lyrics and how they would fit into music, so let that be known.
Blessed with 8.
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| Re: Intersection by INTRANSIT |
25-Nov-03/3:10 PM |
Hrmm. well, its choppy flow suits it.. but that second gaze.. Perhaps phase? ;/ oi.
Well, I'm known to braze- but today I flicker and smoke. Its very raw stuff, good though; it has room to form itself, and even change colors like a cameleon.
I'll save my vote for now, second and third looks will probly change my outlook on it. much fun to be had with this piece.
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| Re: Tales of Woah (Episode #1 Corp. Shin Shines) by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
25-Nov-03/9:03 PM |
reminds me of DA's "Gilded Stumps of Olde"
but less of the baffle humor.. well, cmon now- its hard to beat stuff like:
"beating a blindfolded slave about the pate with his left badmington racket, all the while lubricating him with a greased parson's nose."
But you nearly matched that when you mentioned the turtle and rusted plumbing.
should write up confrontation between Corp. Shin Shines & Captain Gaybrush Threepchoad- I'd pay to read it lol.
Blessed with 8.
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27-Nov-03/10:14 PM |
sweet & sour takeout till the split rummy hour
can not see the calm eye of a tornado
bitter & dour it will grip you with its power
dust will sting & cover what you know
Its my brewing pot- sprinkled with spice
my foe becomes apart of the boiling gumbo
sqealing with angst- flailing like mice
woe for having been caught in the flow
Its a water-park jungle, so do bring the goggles
and a sturdy vessel- or one that can float
these turbid tides will give you plenty of wobbles
casting saltwater stains on what you wrote
but- hey? its earned my blessing of six.
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| Re: Mr Zero? Your a coward. by DreamerSupreme |
27-Nov-03/10:23 PM |
Well shucks.. this write up got almost straight tens!?
you guys, I can never be angry long- ya'll soon brighten up my day always.
One of these days one of me pieces will get 6 average.. i feel it coming closer.. so elusive damnit. hope it isn't on this one though lol- that would be too ironic.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Nov-03/10:35 PM |
if you threw out "A stick is" then added "crumpets are"- you'd would have had me sold.. but then again, one must find his own special spice to give his haiku its punch.
This one fizzed and poofed, but you'll get better as you write some more.
Blessed with four.
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| Re: As You Are by MacFrantic |
27-Nov-03/10:59 PM |
really???? ah. I got an answer!
Heres a 2.
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| Re: Spuna Vs. Turkeef by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
28-Nov-03/3:46 AM |
Who smokes meth again? Just making sure you know.
Whats strange? it makes sense to me, somehow.. love it-utterly enamored by its twisted alienism. Actually? I'm fucking jealouse. But anyone who's anyone knows that.
Ten on turkeef. Spuna smells- and my nigger cat liked it.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7-Dec-03/7:19 AM |
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the ending gives me the shivers. 9
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| Re: The Morning Star by Shardik |
8-Dec-03/4:32 AM |
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be interesting to hear. 9
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