Re: Fetch by Limness	27-Aug-02/11:30 PM
excellent suggestion. here's my stanza: he don't bark at strangers/he don't chase the cat/ the mailman's his friend/what's up with that??
Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus	27-Aug-02/11:37 PM
indeed! well since i'm on a roll with buttah, i'll make one more suggestion: 'or is it merely a series/of lines loosed on squiggles/ black knobbed on grey, an etch-a-sketch maasterpiece'
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/11:41 PM
1. there's not a lot you can learn rom a single sfternoon's perusal of some philospher's ramblings 2. 'for me to become a master of discipline/ would be impossible', would work better for me
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	27-Aug-02/11:42 PM
and, let's not leave out the coalesced nonsequiters...OMG!! i just made it EVEN LONGER...
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/11:48 PM
blunt the neck, call the pecker on it!
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	27-Aug-02/11:51 PM
something that makes no sense, coming from off the previous statement. my mom is a master of it: me: mom, what time are you coming over for dinner? mom: do you know if your father is going to grandpa's today? welcome to my world. 1 hour later, she'll call and ask what time she should come over.... if i could borrow aragorn, or even an orc...dinner is at 7...
Re: Fetch by Limness	27-Aug-02/11:53 PM
he dug up the yard/he chewed my damn slippers/ he ate all the garbage/except for the kippers...
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/11:57 PM
hey, i lived there too. don't forget getting the rolls and pastry at the deli/bakery sunday mornings.
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	27-Aug-02/11:59 PM
dude, i could make a cake shaped like a dark fortress, and he could hack it to bits with Narsil
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/12:01 AM
my mom would then thank him for helping her out--she prefers 'trifle' to actual cake; that's where you break it up and mix it in a bowl with coolwhip and pudding and skors bars... i don't thing he'd go for that. do you? he'd weep all over his glitt'ring blade...
Re: 'The Grey' Triplet by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/12:03 AM
alas! an enya tune! and i am already weary....
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/12:11 AM
night mrs g.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/12:15 AM
certes.
Re: Tryst by <~>	28-Aug-02/6:19 AM
yeah. keeps me warm at night too. hahahahaha. ha.
Re: Evening by unknown	28-Aug-02/6:23 AM
easy. easy. yes, comments have been sarcastic recently. it happens. i did not appreciate the censorship, perceived or real. i see it was not intentional; fine. but your poems all sound the same. diversify?
Re: Night scene by unknown	28-Aug-02/6:28 AM
okay, so this one is strays from the former flock. how about 'locked to the bed by silver chains'? rolls out, smooth sadism...
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/6:34 AM
wow. this is so good and so bad, all at the same time. clever descriptions and solid idea vs. language uncertain and awkwardly assembled. dissect. reassemble. polish. ta da! please consider reworking this; it pleases me greatly and it's only a suckling. it would destroy me, should it arrive full-fleshed...
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/7:05 AM
keybored is very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/7:06 AM
ironically, this appeared randomly immediately following 'nentwined wins'.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/1:44 PM
on the contrary. i identified with the poem, and enjoyed it. i don't think i voted, though, so i'll do that now: 9. i guess my cryptic comment didn't say that i liked it, huh. what i meant to say was that i felt vast emptiness speeding off on all sides as i read this. i felt like oil dropped into water, thinning across the surface, and dissolving, staining. reading your poem made me feel so very lonenly. what was it's inspirarion, please?