| Re: While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
17-Mar-03/4:10 PM |
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17-Mar-03/4:12 PM |
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very cool, i thought that haiku was a 5-7-5 thing. Someone tell if I am mistaken.
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| Re: lost by elizabethann |
17-Mar-03/4:13 PM |
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18-Mar-03/12:12 PM |
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| Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8 |
18-Mar-03/12:15 PM |
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| Re: A Face Of Sadness by mr_ice55 |
18-Mar-03/2:02 PM |
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Awesome, could be better if u dropped the last para tho. And changed "pillow" to somthing else
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18-Mar-03/5:15 PM |
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| Re: Horse meat & pistols by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
18-Mar-03/5:19 PM |
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| Re: iodine and baby oil by rockinindividual |
18-Mar-03/5:30 PM |
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The whole baby oil thing sounds a little wierd but works. Could have used a little more backround on the charecter maybe
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18-Mar-03/5:39 PM |
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Can the author tell me how this makes sense
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| Re: Green genius by INTRANSIT |
18-Mar-03/5:41 PM |
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| Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8 |
18-Mar-03/5:48 PM |
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This poem reminds me of a Project 86 song in the way it is put together. Nice job horus, whats with the 8 in your name anyways?
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| Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8 |
18-Mar-03/5:51 PM |
Here it is,
Submerged in endless (trailing off)
I watch them fade by (sigh)
Lifeless and Stone-faced (paining on)
I see...
The face I use to be
They want to feel this (straining on)
They want to sense this (now)
Drunk with existence (waking me)
I'll show you something (someone) you can feel
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| Re: I'll Break You Down by Crakyamuni |
18-Mar-03/5:56 PM |
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Corporate america sucks, of as horus would say laggniappe
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| Re: I'll Break You Down by Crakyamuni |
18-Mar-03/5:57 PM |
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Crap i meant "or as"i always do that
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20-Mar-03/8:56 PM |
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well i think you just got caught writing a dumb poem, im not trying to be mean i just dont like it and i think if you try harder you could turn this concept into somthing good.
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20-Mar-03/8:58 PM |
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this isnt even a poem, its like your telling your friends at school what you did friday night.
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20-Mar-03/9:01 PM |
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Now this is an actual poem, while it might not be the best its a good start, i myself am not even that great but the suggestions and comments from this site have showed me how crappy i am and how much further i need to go
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20-Mar-03/9:02 PM |
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I think you smoked some bad granola
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20-Mar-03/9:20 PM |
Hey i tried to send a message to ya, but it didnt work do u have a new email
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