on Ghost in My Swimming Pool by ObiWonKn
16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
this is the third time this written this this morning. does anybody know how to write something that is not about death? I ask out of utility and curiousity not out of bitterness. just frustration
on Ode to Thomas by RosiePosie
16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
i met a guy named thomas and wrote something called mix for the co-incarnated. i was not overly concerned about doubt. it has utility. so, criticism: overuse of meaningless words like (1) truth, (2) destiny, and (3) sanctity; remember you have an audience. try numbers instead : )
on the coldest hell by skaskowski
16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
oldest is a fallacy in my opinion. are superlatives fallcies? peace.
on unsalvaged by skaskowski
16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
rhyming has utility. i especially liked how it said a-toned instead of s-toned. the following is not personal: does anybody know how to wirte a poem that is not about death?
on Fragrant Blossom by Jody Conn
16 Mar 2002, 1:21 AM
A wonderful whine in an imperative language