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Free verse № 198

the coldest hell

by skaskowski

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 9 comments

the coldest hell is whispering your name into and empty ear unlistening, This old familiar fear becomes reality... the coldest hell is satin in a fireplace, a baby born in outer space, forgetting a beloved face... wasted. the coldest hell, the oldest hell is waking up to nothing but pain that quickly muffles the chirping birds and rising sun, a dying day that won't begin... The Coldest Hell is when you start to hate me piece by piece, and withering, i do not have the strength to stand from knees... The coldest hell for me would be if you told me goodbye, but your Heaven might be the same...

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9 comments

[4] anonymous 2-Jul-01/4:46 PM Reply
really doesn't work for me. a combo of "cliche" and "huh?", with a bit too much "cutesy".
[4] anonymous 3-Jul-01/9:39 AM Reply
empty ear unlistening = good. face/place/outer space bit = weak.
[4] anonymous 4-Jul-01/12:24 AM Reply
Social Parody and Voluntary are much better than this.
[4] anonymous 4-Jul-01/12:25 AM Reply
Social Parody and Voluntary are much better than this. This poem is self-indulgent.
[4] anonymous 16-Jul-01/6:50 PM Reply
This really gets my heart. I honestly have chills.
[n/a] Modulo 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
This made me feel a very particular emotion, but I wasn't very happy with the end wording. Very blatant after a very subtle rise and fall.
[n/a] notule 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
oldest is a fallacy in my opinion. are superlatives fallcies? peace.
[8] Piano 8-Apr-02/5:35 PM Reply
I still love this poem! Piano
[n/a] poetandknowit 14-Aug-02/11:59 AM Reply
I sure wish I know what the hell this one meant. Why The Coldest Hell and then the coldest hell later? And more brilliant use of the ellipsoidal!