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Ghost in My Swimming Pool (Free verse) by ObiWonKn Last night, there was a ghost in my swimming pool
When I checked the
water levels
Scattered ancient recollections,
Leaves littering the
situation
Even more
I recognize this apparition
From other late night
swims
And long jumps
Off the diving board
He thinks he?s funny,
Bubbling up from the filters,
Staring at me,
As if he is someone else
Ruby rose color
In the whites of my eyes
I wake up naked,
Without a
disguise
He came again last night
To remind me of you
Bizarre and
endless
Like the pieces of glass
Lying on the floor of my swimming pool
Up the ladder:
I WILL SURVIVE
Down the ladder:
Waiting for my Beautiful Woman
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:16 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:16 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.1504064 Overall Rank: 5216 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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is it the "you" that is buzarre and endless, or the ghost? How do the ghost and "you" tie together? "Bubbling up from the filters" is good. Good images. Doesn't really come together for me, though.
where does seeing this apparition take you? Is it you - an aspect of yourself you had forgotten or lost? Great effort - but there is a connection missing.
Don't understand the "glass" in pool-makes me wonder if suicide is hinted at?
I like it, but it's a bit vague. I don't quite get who the ghost is, or what he's after?
i like this one. the ghost is obviously your own reflection.
but i dont understand some parts. "He came again last night To remind me of you" 269 view(s)
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