Ode to Thomas

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 5 comments

Here we are, just hand in hand Taking the path most chosen But walking with such sacred steps We'll trip, we'll fall, we'll get back up For never more perfect a pair Souls destined, entwined, sparkling With love, for knowing madness Can only bring content. Here you are, pushing past the norm Filling hollow hearts with wonder Catapulting kisses with brevity And drawing out reality For just one moment To speak my name I'm drawn into your breath Your warmth Your sanctity. Living Juliets love So tripped down into you Romeo's incessant tears Never could compare To your hands gentle touch To your hearts eternal care. My love, My Star filled night Be here to forever guide me. And We'll keep walking The path to truth, to destiny.

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[4] anonymous 14-Jun-01/12:09 AM Reply

The only line worth keeping "catapulting kisses wtih brevity" -- ditch the rest.

[4] anonymous 16-Jul-01/6:46 PM Reply

Must be nice...

[n/a] Jill Stockinger 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply

Sweet, sad..some very good lines

[n/a] notule 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply

i met a guy named thomas and wrote something called mix for the co-incarnated. i was not overly concerned about doubt. it has utility. so, criticism: overuse of meaningless words like (1) truth, (2) destiny, and (3) sanctity; remember you have an audience. try numbers instead : )

[3] pete 28-Jul-02/5:13 PM Reply

sorry rosieposie but yuck ! the truth and sanctity of your destiny needs more careful presentation for an audience of poets