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Ode to Thomas (Free verse) by RosiePosie
Here we are, just hand in hand Taking the path most chosen But walking with such sacred steps We'll trip, we'll fall, we'll get back up For never more perfect a pair Souls destined, entwined, sparkling With love, for knowing madness Can only bring content. Here you are, pushing past the norm Filling hollow hearts with wonder Catapulting kisses with brevity And drawing out reality For just one moment To speak my name I'm drawn into your breath Your warmth Your sanctity. Living Juliets love So tripped down into you Romeo's incessant tears Never could compare To your hands gentle touch To your hearts eternal care. My love, My Star filled night Be here to forever guide me. And We'll keep walking The path to truth, to destiny.

Up the ladder: Man in the mirror

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.59375
Weighted score: 5.5932093
Overall Rank: 2319
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:16 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:16 AM PST
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Comments:
[4]... anonymous @ | 14-Jun-01/12:09 AM | Reply
The only line worth keeping "catapulting kisses wtih brevity" -- ditch the rest.
[4]... anonymous @ | 16-Jul-01/6:46 PM | Reply
Must be nice...
[n/a] Jill Stockinger @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
Sweet, sad..some very good lines
[n/a] notule @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
i met a guy named thomas and wrote something called mix for the co-incarnated. i was not overly concerned about doubt. it has utility. so, criticism: overuse of meaningless words like (1) truth, (2) destiny, and (3) sanctity; remember you have an audience. try numbers instead : )
[3] pete @ 194.222.69.43 | 28-Jul-02/5:13 PM | Reply
sorry rosieposie but yuck ! the truth and sanctity of your destiny needs more careful presentation for an audience of poets
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