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Ode to Thomas (Free verse) by RosiePosie

Here we are, just hand in hand Taking the path most chosen But walking with such sacred steps We'll trip, we'll fall, we'll get back up For never more perfect a pair Souls destined, entwined, sparkling With love, for knowing madness Can only bring content. Here you are, pushing past the norm Filling hollow hearts with wonder Catapulting kisses with brevity And drawing out reality For just one moment To speak my name I'm drawn into your breath Your warmth Your sanctity. Living Juliets love So tripped down into you Romeo's incessant tears Never could compare To your hands gentle touch To your hearts eternal care. My love, My Star filled night Be here to forever guide me. And We'll keep walking The path to truth, to destiny.

anonymous 14-Jun-01/12:09 AM
The only line worth keeping "catapulting kisses wtih brevity" -- ditch the rest.




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