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| Re: Nightwalker by Another Bobjim?!?! |
9-Jan-03/9:21 PM |
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I mean fucking come on, "flitting from shadow to shadow"? The drama imagery at the ends sucks shit and the only good line in this is "rough" and the two after it don't make any sense. Just fucking start over and make it worthwhile. THINK OF THE POINT FIRST AND GO FROM THERE.
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| Re: Hector's such a drag by Bachus |
9-Jan-03/10:29 PM |
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I thought you were gonna replace it with something else. I'm amazed you've turned this into such a masterpiece. I especially like how you took my obnoxious "I don't care bit" and said "I don't care that Jesus was a male Hustler. I don't care".
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| Re: Hector's such a drag by Bachus |
9-Jan-03/10:32 PM |
"My life consists of homework, meal preparation and recreation
(like poemranker)." (like poemranker)->(like the discus). That's a bit funnier I think.
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| Re: heathen love by w~* ATHENA *~w |
9-Jan-03/11:41 PM |
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9-Jan-03/11:46 PM |
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I know all three of you are Dark Angel. The game is up, Moriarty.
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10-Jan-03/11:14 AM |
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| Re: lost love by cherish |
10-Jan-03/2:03 PM |
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I'd crank it up to 11 if I could dude. nice one, I know what ur going through.
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10-Jan-03/3:01 PM |
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I think cherish's work is marvelous.
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