Re: Aftermath of a boston marriage by Sugar Victim	1-Jun-03/4:17 PM
"prays for hope as her world uncurls" unfurls, would work better. nameless. "Maybe though dieng you'll see we're not unalike!"" through dying. Also, the piece needs to put come commas to work for it.
Re: Aftermath of a boston marriage by Sugar Victim	1-Jun-03/4:19 PM
Overall, not a bad collection, but it's not setting new standards, that's for sure. I would of given you sixes and sevens. Maybe an eight after some editing.
Re: shopper by zzinnia66	1-Jun-03/6:37 PM
Of course.
Re: The Door by Wulf	2-Jun-03/12:23 AM
Ah, good clean fun.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-03/1:59 AM
Okay, the 2 lb. fist thing was extreme, but only because I care.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-03/11:23 AM
So let me get this straight. When Vipearsnipples posted this at Steve Perry's request, the two of you thought it so special and insightful that you voted blue and green ten's along with your felching pink bunny poets and friends whom I'm sure you called up in one way or another to get their votes attached. Then when you couldn't handle the heat in the poetic kitchen of champions and your unintelligent top notch catastrophe failed miserably to even remotely be considered a witty retort you start deleting comments. So -=Dark_Angel=- strategically decides to post the same poem in a way that keeps vipears's nipples and Steve Perry from removing, before said comments, (which, by the way, I would like to call a Bacchian power play) you give the same exact piece of shit poetic statement 0's and 1's? Now that's just funny, sad, but truly fucking funny. What a waste good singers and pears. Here's my vote 10! Because I'll put my balls where your mouth's are.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-03/12:06 PM
Have you ever been wacked across the face by a horse's tail?
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-03/1:32 PM
Vewery Vewery good iner hosen iner earin abd fun for skipping, cheese toast anyone? You know you used a word mixer language tweaker bitch. Treatise that in ur hosen.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-03/1:34 PM
"Our strident feet push through the mastadon hut" Oh my, now you've done it. lol.
Re: nothing is by w~* ATHENA *~w	2-Jun-03/11:39 PM
Yeah, pretty drunk.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Jun-03/11:43 PM
Last night I dreamt i stopped writing poetry. It became a national holiday comprised of nudity and chocolate thai sticks.
Re: Techno Whore by hotwire	2-Jun-03/11:45 PM
Indeedy.
Re: That November Night by hotwire	2-Jun-03/11:49 PM
I really enjoyed your unacceptance of the past-tense, and your depiction of the word 'meant'. Really, it was captivating.
Re: Adam's Apple by hotwire	3-Jun-03/12:19 AM
fag.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-03/12:25 PM
Oh lordy, this is like being on a horse with Haus racing across the ponderosa. Lordy, lordy, lordy, first off I'm flattered, really, to think me involved with such great minds as kaolin's and -=Dark_Angel=-'s plunderings! but no, I am not Kaolin, for the simple fact that I'm horus8, don't you fucking Google? My name Is Jeremi. I am horus8. See how that works. dark Angel is a series of wires and electrodes hooked up to an ancient and well kept secret called 'Capt. Prawn' and kaolin is the inventor of this website. Dark shark is some horrible poet trying to suck up, to us master's of the spoken word and you and your daughter are stupid fucking crybabys that don't have the guts to be poets nor the 'skills G'. When your daughter called herself the Picasso of poetry she was setting herself up for this kind of let down. Because poets don't say ridiculously stupid shit like that. It's just not done I have a superman haircut and a penis that curves off to the left, coupled by large bulbous muscles. People have often said that I'm kind to the eyes, therefore, you must forgive me for pulling off my gauntlet and cunt smacking that gash in your face you call a mouth. You are a shit poor poet and a sore loser, and your daughter is a hack with no talent in fact negative talent a void and it's you and your legless husbands fault deal with it. Maybe if you could afford a real computer you would be able to distinguish three completely different people that share a common bond of thinking you and your daughter can't write from the one or two you've merged us into. To change the subject though. This is by far your best work! It's the leaning tower of towers, it's a gravity powered douche the body can absorb. It is to vagina what penis is to sheep. I personally am proud of you, I have never seen a person go from shine to shit this quick, not even Ornella Muti, and she was the fucking devil's swollen scrotum. You just might be a poet yet. Or just a pillow for my sore nuts when I get tired of face fucking your hack of a poet daughter. here's a ten. I know it's not a bigger penis or legs for your old man, but what the hell I'm feeling giddy today.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-03/12:31 PM
I believe that there is a dangerous Karmic forcing growing in my fridge's crisper because when I opened it up just now my shitake mushrooms were gangraping a left over piece of pita bread. the wailing crys were to much. I had to jettison the entire drawer off of the space craft. Please forgive me Jesus.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-03/3:28 PM
Yes, you are a vampire lesbian hack. This is obviously mechanically produced poetry, being that you are unable to write a poem even remotely interesting.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-03/6:53 PM
"Yuck I don't like Bran muffins" if you took this part and squashed it to "No Way". I'd feel more particular to the piece and to the bran muffin.
Re: Where I Stand by Katie	3-Jun-03/8:23 PM
hmmmmm.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-03/8:24 PM
lol.