Re: good-bye kansas city: meditation #2 by poetandknowit	13-Aug-02/11:47 AM
I wouldn't call it high art. But that crocodile... man, I love that crocodile.
Re: setting the record straight on April by poetandknowit	13-Aug-02/11:46 AM
This poem has potential. It is not entirely coherent, but it has an excellent combination of ideas that, with a little work, could be well worth reading. "April is the cruellest month," is an allusion to the prologue to the Canterbury Tales where April is beautiful and warm, rather than rainy and miserable and dead as Eliot sees it. You attack Eliot as he attacked Chaucer which is good... carrying on the tradition, I suppose.
Re: Words of the World of the Wise by emilyowey	13-Aug-02/11:34 AM
Internal rhyme rules! And the alliteration is delicious. I don't know if I like this poem because it includes the words "tango", "tangerine" or because of it's fantastic rhythm. The last line needs work, it takes away from the rest of the poem. Make it more confident. Lose the "...?"
Re: good-bye kansas city: meditation #1 by poetandknowit	13-Aug-02/11:31 AM
See previous comment about seeking some education. Enjambment is a useful poetic device, but chopping a poorly written sentence into three word statements is not high art.
Re: power by flatliner	13-Aug-02/11:29 AM
Good rhythm. Try to put some images in. Poetry should stimulate the senses.
Re: Winged Beauty by ThoughtfulSoul	13-Aug-02/11:28 AM
poetandknowit... you went to college? I, honestly, am surprised. Did you major in business? Economics? Accounting? I had the impression that there was a writing requirement for most college degrees. Obviously you found a way around that. Congratulations. Thoughtfulsoul, try to develop your images a little more. "The sight of her extended white/feathered wings" is good. Try to slip in a few more gems like that here and there and you'll have a work of art.
Re: La tasse de vie by keatsImnot	13-Aug-02/11:23 AM
poetandknowit, lack of capitalisation doth not a poem make. This poem does well with a tired form and subject matter.
Re: A Passing Love by razorgrin	27-Jul-02/10:04 PM
They call me the wild rose... Well, that's what this poem makes me think.
Re: hatred by yarlgrenn	2-Jun-02/5:17 PM
I like this poem. You have a good sense of internal rhyme which, coupled with alliteration, really gives this poem its magic.
Re: swimming by lexicon	30-May-02/9:34 PM
sunshiny isn't very poetic.