power

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 Jul 2002 · 2 comments

i see you look at me a flurry of emotion clouds my eye and if i thought i'd sit peacefully my heart didn't even try so there was the start it was the day caught by rain we shared a table and my heart the precursor to the pain.

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[4] limonade 13-Aug-02/11:29 AM Reply

Good rhythm. Try to put some images in. Poetry should stimulate the senses.

[8] FadedHappiness 25-Aug-04/4:31 AM Reply

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