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turn the cameras off (Free verse) by crin
i always wanted something more but now i'm not so sure about this world this show's gone into syndication the ratings are dropping like flies your eyes are the ones i despise let's wash out these dirty veins bleach the skin until the blemishes fade we made this mess now let's scrape until it all flakes away so we can look brand new in front of these godforsaken cameras now i don't why i ever thought i'd want to be actor because this life has enough performances i always wanted something more now i don't think i want to play this role anymore i'm missing all my marks i'm too frustrated to remember my lines your eyes are the ones i despise this set has become a killing floor

Up the ladder: The musician
Down the ladder: power

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.75
Weighted score: 5.447011
Overall Rank: 2973
Posted: October 25, 2003 3:48 PM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2003 3:48 PM PDT
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[10] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.177 | 25-Oct-03/5:16 PM | Reply
Your life must be a living hell. Thank you for sharing that with us through your poetry. -10-
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 27-Oct-03/6:10 PM | Reply
kindof a lyrical quality.

Not crazy about the lowercase "i"s, and maybe a tad too many cliches/term dropping - but workable methinks.
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