Re: a comment on Dying for a Dowry by Blue Magpie	13-Oct-02/8:21 PM
Hi, Glad you liked it, the story came from New Scientist, which I get months behind time, I can go check out the exact issue if you wish, I put them in my school after I have read them. Line 5 should be women not woman The murders should be Their murderers its amazing the mistakes that a spell checker doesn't pick up.
Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass	11-Oct-02/5:43 AM
Good, I liked this, though I would take heed of the good advice already given.
Re: Poet's Rest by Brennan	11-Oct-02/5:34 AM
I meant dead poets, sorry about the typo.
Re: The Waking by Brennan	11-Oct-02/5:25 AM
Hi, I like the fact that this has some rhyme and rhythm, not that that is essential, but it oftens adds well. However there are a number of places where simple adjustments could make improvements. for example. The choices made on night before The choices made the night before substituting the for on here makes the whole thing more grammatical and flows just as well, thus it is easier on the mind.
Re: Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit	10-Oct-02/5:51 AM
Are you sure the alarm will disturb the bird song, or just your appreciation of, surely the birds will keep singing. The message is fine, but I think the 2nd stanza could do with some work, it is difficult to read presently.
Re: a comment on Creativity. by Blue Magpie	9-Oct-02/8:35 PM
Dear God's Wife, What an interesting name, I realise that much of my poetry is not what you would call grand, it is not meant to be, it is meant to be easily understood, it is meant to communicate with many people, not just the few who can get inside my head or who share my knowledge base. I do right more seriois peotry and maybe I will post some here. Thanks for reading and for the kind words.
Re: a comment on Friendship by Blue Magpie	9-Oct-02/8:25 PM
Hi Poet, Ok maybe there are, I will keep looking, I have to consider the voting farsical however having seen what people are doing with it. A snow flake is unlikely to melt on the nose of a snow as snowmen are made of snow, so it is right in its element. Yes obviously it is not mean't to be a deeply meaningful poem confronting the ills of modern society.
Re: song of the birds by rainbow	9-Oct-02/8:54 AM
Hi Rainbow, Is there a reason you have left out the punctuation and capitalisation, they are one of a poet's tools and give you more scope to express yourself if used properly. The title is a little misleading here, but the experience is real enough, I have been there, it would be a better poem if you had identified the inner shadow more fully, why should you suddenly become selfconciously aware of your aloneness rather than of the forest's beauty. The answer is all in your mind.
Re: ITS A SHAMBLES by lukehanney	9-Oct-02/7:55 AM
With this club you're not affliated, This line is an inversion, not really a recommended technique for world shattering poets.
Re: Possibilities by Nicholas Jones	9-Oct-02/7:37 AM
I fail to see how you can write about anything other than that which you know, even a complete fantasy is known in some way by the time it is written. Ah well that is just me.
Re: Truths by Nicholas Jones	9-Oct-02/7:24 AM
I think there should be a comma, if not a semi colon after "thesis bound" Politics always seemed a lose - lose game to me.
Re: a comment on Creativity. by Blue Magpie	9-Oct-02/7:16 AM
Hi Nicholas, Well yes it ispossible that I have the tools of a poet, or maybe I am slowly gaining them. However this poem was written with its ultimate intended audience as people who are not poets, the bulk of humanity. Thanks for responding to both my poems.
Re: a comment on Friendship by Blue Magpie	9-Oct-02/7:10 AM
Hi Nicholas, Thanks for leaving a messasge, I must admit I am unsure how long I will keep working here, I have not found much to inspire me so far. But I will try not to judge too rapidly.
Re: why i look like a man by rosiebailey	8-Oct-02/6:19 AM
Do you seriously want me to vote on this.
Re: a comment on Friendship by Blue Magpie	8-Oct-02/6:11 AM
Hi Vulcan, Thanks for taking the time to read this.
Re: One Angel Too Many by Queen_Sway	7-Oct-02/10:00 PM
Nice idea, but way too wordy for my personal tastes