| Re: a comment on Happy Charlene by Dovina |
11-Jul-05/7:57 PM |
interesting. I missed it. now reading it
back I don't know what I saw.
I still like it.
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| Re: a comment on Happy Charlene by Dovina |
11-Jul-05/7:46 PM |
What's it about.
since I got it wrong.
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| Re: a comment on Damned by darby pyn |
11-Jul-05/7:04 PM |
it can be. but being you are the person
who causes that finality. and not just
getting satisfaction by looking he needs to do
you can't have one without the other.
my opinion only.
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| Re: Happy Charlene by Dovina |
11-Jul-05/3:53 PM |
nice positive emotions.
a good read.
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| Re: a comment on Flies in the ointment. by darby pyn |
11-Jul-05/3:41 PM |
sorry it confused you.
it was not my intention to be vague.
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| Re: a comment on Flies in the ointment. by darby pyn |
11-Jul-05/3:39 PM |
OK.
discarded plankton. microscopic food for fish.
discarded to emphasize the lack of care for.
head held down in a permanent slouch.
it suggest the ambiguous response to the question asked.
thanks for the questions.
hope it explains what I meant.
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| Re: a comment on Almost Persuaded by Dovina |
8-Jul-05/11:18 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Almost Persuaded by Dovina |
8-Jul-05/11:05 AM |
it feels political.
itâs vague. I like vague shit Iâm the
king of vagueness. the last word reprehensible.
it feel like. what we donât know wont hurt us
but itâs bad. like the means justify the ends.
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| Re: a comment on Almost Persuaded by Dovina |
8-Jul-05/10:21 AM |
I knew as soon as I clicked. that sentence was wrong.
I know youâre deeper then that.
and Iâm not consumed with sex..
I like it. but not consumed.
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| Re: a comment on The choices we make by darby pyn |
7-Jul-05/10:14 PM |
You're right about the rhyme dictating the poem.
definitely something to ponder on.
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| Re: a comment on What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn |
7-Jul-05/8:16 PM |
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| Re: Almost Persuaded by Dovina |
7-Jul-05/3:46 PM |
the title seems to imply it's about
someone persuading another into having sex.
it's ok.... but a little mechanical.
it needs more emotion.
just my opinion.
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| Re: a comment on Damned by darby pyn |
7-Jul-05/3:17 PM |
BWC I respect your writing. and you always seem sincere
with your questions so I'll try to explain.
the poem itself is about the movie "American psycho".
I do poems about movies alot. it's just something I
like to do."I try to hide but the cacophony in my head
scrapes the calcium from my bones and I
wilt". this means this person is going crazy.
the voices in his head so on and so on are wearing on
him he tries to hide by doing normal things
tries hobbies etc. but he's loosing the fight
his compulsion to kill is taking over. he is wilting
from strengh to fight these urges to become a killer.
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| Re: a comment on Damned by darby pyn |
7-Jul-05/3:04 PM |
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| Re: a comment on The taste of something new. by darby pyn |
5-Jul-05/8:56 PM |
it's just used as a metaphor. I could have said glass.
I meant it closer to your second analogy.
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| Re: a comment on The taste of something new. by darby pyn |
5-Jul-05/10:15 AM |
could you explain the other way dovina.
thanks.
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| Re: a comment on The taste of something new. by darby pyn |
4-Jul-05/2:41 PM |
I use the word steep to describe the severity
of the disconnection.
and vanity I always thought as being an obvious
characteristic.
everyoneâs interpretation is different but
I thank you for your opinion.
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| Re: Try Thinking Too by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk |
2-Jul-05/12:44 AM |
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| Re: My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit |
2-Jul-05/12:07 AM |
I enjoyed this.
well done.
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| Re: a comment on What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn |
1-Jul-05/11:02 PM |
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