Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/6:30 AM
yep, it helps. thanks a ton. :-). and now for the disagreeable points, since you hint that there is.....
Re: Just for Show (Suicide revised) by sliver	19-Dec-05/6:16 AM
spiritually speaking u have it dead right.
Re: To Michelle by ALChemy	19-Dec-05/5:08 AM
Beautifully worded.
Re: Prayer For The Church by sliver	19-Dec-05/4:59 AM
Sliver, do your best and God will do the rest. Keep up the good work. (10)
Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/4:45 AM
ha ha ha.... my son's name is not Danny Boy. so i see your point. Is 'she did miss' grammatically wrong? i didn't seem to find anything wrong in it, find its usage sounding awkard. would like insight, if its technically wrong. Help. Now finding what was in favour of it........ - written from the heart - an outline of true incidents? - it had message ? - the tense of speech was uniform through out? ....... i don't know exactly what you want me to pin-point to. and what is it that worked aainst it ? enlighten me .
Re: a comment on I love to see the sunrise by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/4:33 AM
i rise before my children, and take time to pray for about ten minutes or so. that's enough to see the sunrise and feel the new day dawn in. it also gives me time to think about what i want to do today. i am a very restless person when i don't do anything, and so i plan out a lot of activities, like drawing and painting, big blow up pictures for my kids, teach my daughter to colour, especially within alphabet outlines. this way she learns the alphabets unconsciously while learning to color too. there are lots of things that one could try. You'll never know you can do it until you try it out. Each one can find inspiration in themselves.......look deep within.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/4:25 AM
Suit yourself, and merry christmas, by the way. jesus loves you the way you are, he always has and always will.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/4:22 AM
Interesting, very interesing! do you challenge all your co-poets to write thus? I like the idea.....lets see what i can do. its a very attractive challenge. how fast i'll get it done is another matter. but i'm gonna try.
Re: To My Love by sliver	19-Dec-05/12:52 AM
Beautifully written. i wonder who these jerks are who gave you a zero. Heartless, sadists!
Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/12:37 AM
i know what you mean. i couldn't get all to rhyme, and so i didn't force myself. thought i'd get a public opinion on this approach. Personally i'm more comfortable with rhymes and a definite rhythm. thankyou for your review. i value your opinion, and look forward to more advice from you.
Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/12:27 AM
I like to have a message in each poem i write, but the hard part is getting to it, trying to put the preface right. thanks for the review.
Re: a comment on My kids by amanda_dcosta	19-Dec-05/12:24 AM
This one is true - very true- my daily activity and life with my kids, Joshua (5) and Ruth(3). It was written few days ago when i asked my husband for a theme or an opening line, and he challenged me with the topic - 'our children', or 'My husband'. well, it was more of a joke than a challenge, but i got thinking and this was written within 15 - 20 minutes. i'm glad i wrote it, it was fun putting it all together. thank you for appreciating it. And zodiac can't ever say that your life is dull, not from how i see it. he gives you enough pep to go on on poemranker. Cheer up.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	17-Dec-05/6:29 PM
You know, -=D_A=-,P.I., there's a treatment for hallucinations. Could help you if you want. and for a disoriented mind too.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/6:59 PM
Not you definitely!
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/6:57 PM
And i suppose you're the one who supplied him his false beard.....You have an occupation, -=D_A=-. Not all of us have been priviledged. Lucky You.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/6:51 PM
Ha ha ha...... you don't scare me buddy boy! Good try! And correction, HE IS NOT HUMAN, HE IS NOT OF THIS EARTH. He is where we strive to reach......the essence of this entire life....for life.
Re: a comment on I love to see the sunrise by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/6:45 PM
Dovina , wilco.....hmmmm, yep, i agree that 'remorse and helping hand' is a bit dry. And for the opening phrase, the reason is found in lines 3,4 of verse 1. or is that also vague?
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/11:43 AM
he was human... what if you or i had any form of resemblence as a baby to jesus............ general discription, he's one of us.
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/10:47 AM
Dovina, i have been reconsidering, the line ' baby jesus, true and sweet', to begin with. and i feel that baby jesus is true. there's nothing false about him, he is the truth. as for sweet, aren't babies sweet, cute, and the like. that's how we got christmas. its just a simple prayer, written by a simple heart, to a simple baby. You see, i did give thought to your point. Merry Christmas.....in advance. i might not be around for about ten days or so. In case i manage to sneek in, you might get another wish from me. Have a whole lot of gluttons to feed tomorrow.......our warm up X'mas party. Ginger wine just made....wanna try some?
Re: a comment on CHRISTMAS EVERYDAY by amanda_dcosta	16-Dec-05/9:10 AM
zodiac,You depict a typical 'crab' nature. the moment one climbs up the sides of the vessel their in, the other fellow crabs always pull the other down telling it to join them on 'earth'... well, try giving her a way out. you might see her coming back ( in polite terms) to terra firma after finding no landing on the clouds.....oops i forgot we're talking about horses here. At the moment let her enjoy her stallion -Split Fire. surely you have an ounce of generosity in you, for that, haven't you. Or am I wrong?