Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/7:31 PM
I have Twains story of The garden of Eden in my computer somewhere.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/7:23 PM
In my teen years.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/8:52 AM
The Perfect Woman Doesn't she realize what I see through these eyes Tis not the milk white skin or silken hair nor blushed cheeks or flush red lips not starlight eyes that in mine eyes the sun cannot compair Doesn't she comprehend why I love her without end The answers in her foolish grin and her subtle intellect her hopeless dreams her clueless schemes For she is not perfection and that is why she is perfect
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/6:38 AM
I don't believe Jesus would have wanted his religion to be called Christianity, I think he would have wanted it to be called the Nuju. That's me, a Nuju. Not a devout Nuju though.
Re: a comment on Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	19-Nov-05/6:34 AM
A few images I got while reading this poem you might get a kick out of: While on a second reading with a political approach. When you got to the "Whee" part I couldn't help but picture GWB's face superimposed onto Ned Beatty's in that infamous scene in Deliverence. I got this image of you writing this with the word "Locusts" flying around your head and trying to land on your poem and ruin it. You're feverishly writing while swatting at it and saying "Get the fuck out of here! Go fly up Linda Blairs ass." I kept thinking while I was reading this "Please don't say locusts. This is the best thing I've read in a while and If you say locusts I'm going to kill you.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	19-Nov-05/5:40 AM
Growing up a dyslexic you can imagine the deep respect I have for her.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	19-Nov-05/5:33 AM
Casting begins in June. It took me a while but I found out what a dishdash is and I had to read this of all things to find out. http://www.sodomylaws.org/world/saudi_arabia/saudinews027.htm
Re: a comment on Gerry's Song by ALChemy	19-Nov-05/4:58 AM
Thanks. He's just got a bit part in the story I started writing but he's already one of my favorite characters. I think everyone should try to write a book at least once in thier lives whether they suck at it or not. It's good for the soul. I'm not scared, just a bit lazy.
Re: a comment on dit da haiku by nentwined	18-Nov-05/3:30 PM
Considering the varying results, it made for a worthwhile experiment. I'd give it a 1 or 10 depending on my mood. Right now I'm kinda numb so no vote yet.
Re: dit da haiku by nentwined	18-Nov-05/11:19 AM
I'd like to know what you honestly think of your poem.
Re: Ballad for a bad Irish accent by zodiac	18-Nov-05/10:35 AM
You probably won't see this but this is like a blend of two of my favorite poets. E.A. Poe and Benny Hill. Kilkenny? Southpark? The poem's a classic or should be.
Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	18-Nov-05/10:08 AM
First: Does that ability to echoe word sounds, not rhyme but echoe certain qualities in words together come naturally or is it more of a hair pulling event. Because this one comes out so damn natural. Second: Love how you snuck "bore" in. Third: I bet you're leaning towards the bug being Jesus. I was. Forth: There's a current political spin to this one, intended or not. I could spend all day peeling back layers of this poem. A sign of a great artwork. You really shouldn't give some of these away for free.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	18-Nov-05/9:15 AM
And if you could, seeing christmas is near, throw me another story or two. Hap is a hero deserving of a sequel.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	18-Nov-05/8:59 AM
The hidden part was that I was wondering if she was pregnent and if so it sounds like it's almost birthday time. If not I hope you're going to see her soon anyway.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	18-Nov-05/8:49 AM
I suppose you could say it's all jingle but the last verse is the only one that sounds really catchy to me. You can't blame me really for thinking this went deeper when you consider most of your poems are quite complex or at least most of the ones I've read. I'm sure you'll now give me like 10 links to simple poems of yours and I welcome them. It was only a very slight feeling I had that you had some secret meaning behind it. I'm actually pretty damn happy to see a simpler side to you. "I've never dashed out a door, I'm just imaginative." Unless you are disabled the first parts a lie. But I know what you meant. I only meant the jingle gives things a repetitive effect. It replays in your head and I thought you meant to use the jingle to illustrate that this is stuff that goes on often. Shake the baby was kinda obvious. I do love the music of the piece. I can almost hear a kazoo at the end.
Re: a comment on Haven by cyan9	17-Nov-05/10:43 AM
It started with the willow tree poem and your right I should have minded my own business. It wasn't my fight. But I've been here a little while and I've seen what the approach you were taking to the comments has done to others who started here the same way. Sooner or later someone was going to put you through that big arguement we had and believe me I'm one of the nicer ones. Zodiacs a nice guy too but he's been here a long, long time and I figured he was tired of going through it with people. I do still apologize for butting in. Yes there are some very cruel people here but you'll find they tend to be easy to spot. For an example: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=130308 Take it with a grain of salt and a sense of humor. You won't have to tell them they're asses, everyone already knows they are. Use the eye for an eye approach and make sure it's a zinger with no mistakes. I can see you're already getting much better at that. If you give away your anger (name calling is like a big flashing you're getting to me sign) then they'll pounce on you like wolves. I try to the best of my ability to go by these rules but yes everyone cracks every once in a while so be tough, careful and try to take the highest road. There are definately more people here who are quite kind (but we all have our mean days) than bullies. Dovina's another nice one. I'm sure you'll grow to love her soon, as we all have.
Re: a comment on Submission by Dovina	17-Nov-05/10:08 AM
Don't worry I hardly ever hold a grudge.
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	17-Nov-05/9:56 AM
Oh, I see it's an old post. I think I might see the hidden metaphor too.
Re: Love letter by zodiac	17-Nov-05/9:42 AM
I seem to hear this to the music of "Hey, hey Paula". I see the initial story but can't help but wonder if you haven't deeply hidden one your sly metaphors into the body of this poem. The last line is about the closest thing to a jingle I've ever seen you post. Which gives me the feeling that the dash out the door has happened more than once. That's all I got for you so far.
Re: A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	17-Nov-05/9:10 AM
Sweet. You drew me in with the porno title. Like I said it's sweet but would be infinately more heartwrenching and complex if she had cheated on you with Stuart Barr and then committed suicide. If it's a true story than I apologize profusely.