Re: a comment on A New Year Prayer by amanda_dcosta	9-Jan-06/1:36 AM
That's what can happen if you over capitalize.
Re: a comment on What Matters by Dovina	9-Jan-06/1:31 AM
Can't blame her. I wouldn't want to put my "nose" in front of a colon either.
Re: a comment on What Matters by Dovina	9-Jan-06/12:42 AM
An artist rendering of your poem: http://www.mrpicassohead.com/canvas.html?id=9288240
Re: Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT	8-Jan-06/4:23 PM
I like this, except for "joking oak". How many jokes could a joking oak joke if a joking oak could joke oak jokes?
Re: a comment on Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT	8-Jan-06/4:18 PM
If you ever get crazy enough to do Ice Road Trucking in Alaska you should stop off and say high to Zodiac for us.
Re: What Matters by Dovina	8-Jan-06/3:52 PM
Who is he, Mr. Potatohead?
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	8-Jan-06/3:40 PM
Yeah, It's like nobody wants to except anymore that he came from such a meager background.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	8-Jan-06/3:20 PM
On a simular note. Which guy do you think he was, The Earl of Oxford or the Stratford man?
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	8-Jan-06/2:22 PM
Here's the sad part: I actually own a copy of Hamlet and I was too lazy to look it up in the book. This is the punctuation they used in the book: "To be, or not to be -- that is the question:"
Re: a comment on greymo(u)rn by lmp	8-Jan-06/2:03 PM
Yeah, I was really just trying to put it in a way that he wouldn't be afraid to put poetic elements into his prose poems. I thought it was a good idea you had to swap the text layout styles. It's also a good way to find qualities and flaws in your poem you may not have noticed before. God, my vocabulary is weak today for some reason.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	8-Jan-06/1:36 PM
Thank you. I really need to get good book on punctuation.
Re: a comment on It's Time by PoeticXTC	7-Jan-06/5:00 AM
A hammer and nails aren't constructive either if you don't use them.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	6-Jan-06/6:41 PM
You don't think dropping the "that" might pull the line farther away from the sentence it's supporting though? Doesn't "stretches to the horizon’s hem" without "that" come across as a statement about emerald dresses in general. Like "A dog that speaks french" as opposed to "A dog speaks french". I could really use your help on what the proper punctuation should be in the poem's current form. I googled up like 5 different ways that people punctuated the "To be or not to be" quote.
Re: a comment on greymo(u)rn by lmp	6-Jan-06/2:58 PM
Prose poetry is prose with enough poetic elements that it can't be accepted as just prose.
Re: greymo(u)rn by lmp	6-Jan-06/2:49 PM
I like how you're diversifying yourself.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	6-Jan-06/2:37 PM
I'm sorry if I came off as upset. I was merely confused by you stating something that is obvious. Usually doing that implies that you're either insulting someones intelligence or being vague about what you really mean to say. Apperantly it was the latter. To call your previous comment constructive criticism is once again suggesting an insult to my intelligence. On the other hand your first comment is quite constructive and I even managed to take something from the second one but only because your reaction(not information) confirmed my doubts about the punctuation. Why you are jarred by this "oddball" sentence fragment and not by the one that immediately follows is a mystery to me. I can give you 13 examples of this type of "oddball" sentence in one great poem alone: Rudyard Kipling's "If". As you can see by my responses, I take something possitive from most of the feedback you make vague(not bad) or not. I respect you and I don't take the things you say lite, nor do I respond with spite.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	6-Jan-06/7:32 AM
To do it your way would pull the fragmented sentence farther away from the sentence it's complementing.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	6-Jan-06/7:21 AM
"To be or not to be: that is the question." Thank God Willy didn't listen to you. I may need a comma though, I'll give you that, or a colon after "sarong" and "caress". Punctuation isn't my strong point. What kind of sentence is "Eternal pasteless now." by the way? Oh I see it's different when you do it. In short, of course it's not a complete sentence. So.
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	5-Jan-06/7:47 PM
Thanks D. It's certainly more efficient but by stretching the sentence I think it causes the reader to linger on the images a little longer. But I'm still considering it.
Re: MEANinglessness by lmp	5-Jan-06/4:10 PM
I think you have a good idea for what a prose poem should be. I think this one just needs more ambience.