| Re: Into My World by sliver |
21-Dec-04/7:43 AM |
Renee Blue Eyes!! Dedication your love surely!!
Flowed pretty well towards the end but there was something wrong with the flow initially. Honestly, the 2nd line needs work.
Good work though, I love acrostics. I have many of my own. Hopefully I'd post them soon.
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| Re: Into My World by sliver |
21-Dec-04/7:45 AM |
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I meant to put "Dedication TO your love...". A typo!!
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21-Dec-04/7:55 AM |
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Okay, that's not bad, not bad at all. But it could be made better with some more uniformity in your stanzas. The flow breaks a little too often!!
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| Re: Marrowless highway by INTRANSIT |
21-Dec-04/7:56 AM |
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Wow!! That's indeed one of the most unique poems I've read in any of the poetry sites. Not flawless definitely, but better than most stuff.
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| Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin |
21-Dec-04/7:57 AM |
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Love the weave of words. Check me out if you could!!
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21-Dec-04/8:03 AM |
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The rhymes are kinda not very uniform. Nice imagery though!! A 7 from me!!
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21-Dec-04/8:09 AM |
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Kinda cliched!! No offences but I have just read too much of these stuff lately. The expression is just about fine though!!
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21-Dec-04/8:12 AM |
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That took me around 20 minutes!! Very impressive work, indeed!!!
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| Re: DJ Bling Bling spins authenticity by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
21-Dec-04/8:13 AM |
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Nice!! Haikius could be challenging. Well pulled off!!
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21-Dec-04/8:13 AM |
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That's bloody cruel!! A 7 from me!!
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| Re: DJ Bling Bling spins authenticity by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
21-Dec-04/8:14 AM |
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| Re: A Wanderlust To The New by fevriere |
21-Dec-04/10:31 PM |
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Okay, a bit cheesy but nice work!! Just the rhyme needs a little more work. You start with abcb and end up with aaaa. Anyways, hanks for reading mine. I've posted a new one too. Look at it if you have the chance.
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21-Dec-04/10:39 PM |
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A very heart-felt dedication but a chest-nut nevertheless. You could have done better to avoid cliches. Anyways, a 6 from me and I hope you'd check me out too.
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| Re: Recognition by nentwined |
21-Dec-04/10:44 PM |
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I can't get you. Either I am intellectually challenged or this is crap. I rust your abilities, so I settle for the former conclusion. Do check me out. A 5 as a benefit of doubt!!
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