Re: a comment on Jesus by Dovina	12-Nov-04/8:53 AM
I believe you mean “rant.” To say "ranting" simply adds unnecessary bulk, and to add the plural is, well, more rant.
Re: a comment on Jesus by Dovina	11-Nov-04/8:34 PM
A thoroughly reflective comment.
Re: a comment on Jesus by Dovina	11-Nov-04/8:24 PM
Okay, done. Any more reflections on what I've done?
Re: a comment on A Better God by Dovina	11-Nov-04/8:15 PM
An parp is something that starts with a vowel.
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	11-Nov-04/6:58 PM
There is no incorrect use of logic, for that would be illogical. And there is no incorrect use of emotion. Each stands on its premises – logic on axioms, emotion on perceptions. A poem that is beautiful and artful usually uses both and blends them in invigorating patterns. How can a poem be anything but surface if it uses only logic? It is like a scientific dissertation. To say “the snow makes me warm” is to apply emotion to “snow is reflective of all frequencies of light, much as the sun is a generator of all.” Jroday is one of those poets who lean much further toward emotion than you and I do. We can learn from them.
Re: a comment on A Better God by Dovina	11-Nov-04/2:13 PM
Listen to him trump his way out of trying to trump.
Re: There’s A Voice Deep Inside My Head by celticskatermatt1	11-Nov-04/12:19 PM
Little said for so many words.
Re: Remembrance by Caducus	11-Nov-04/12:08 PM
A fine Veteran's Day sentiment. "Passels" seems unnecessarily erudite. "walls of names which each had a face" -> Walls of names that once were faces.
Re: It Still Hurts by poetryman	11-Nov-04/12:00 PM
For general readers, the last paragraph is not needed. The value of this poem is how it relates us to our own similar feelings.
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	11-Nov-04/11:54 AM
Rather than admitting any possible use for my admittedly far-fetched metaphor, you have chosen to misrepresent it, setting up a substitute straw-man for your arrows. Go ahead, for whatever use that is to you. I fail to see how it is useful to me.
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	11-Nov-04/11:52 AM
What appears dim to you appears bright to me, and not weak either. The poem reflects a strong feeling I had while walking along a dusty road on a cold winter day. The connection between dark colored objects (pain) and their white coverings of snow was just as strong.
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	11-Nov-04/11:24 AM
And who is this glorious "us" whoss demands I must humbly meet?
Re: a comment on A Better God by Dovina	10-Nov-04/4:36 PM
He was if He's perfect --------- (insert insult!!!!!)
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	10-Nov-04/1:34 PM
Yes they are bumtripe, if you do not make the connection (see comment above)
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	10-Nov-04/1:32 PM
You've not gone far wrong. The dark substances (limbs and earth) are the pains each of us carries. The snow covers the limbs and the ground (his jokes, my missives) The dust is the pain showing through, at least partially. I wondered who showed more pain and was closer to the ground and who hid it with white crusty snow. It may be a stretch, but at the time, it seemed a perfectly suitable metaphor.
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	9-Nov-04/5:39 PM
Jroday, Whenever you consider posting a poem or a comment on Poemranker, it’s wise to check the spelling first, insure correct punctuation, grammar and, most of all, logic. These are the things the “smart” people here consider before they call you a dimtard. But as you say, that is not your business, and if logic, grammar and the like concerned you as greatly as something deeper, you would have written to those ends. I am going to think about “sincere ignorance” and “conscientious stupidity” because I believe they will have more to say in time. Thanks for your comment.
Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina	9-Nov-04/3:33 PM
Sorry, I didn't mean to confuse. It's so hard to be clear, why would anyone confuse intentionally? Dust is dry as it moves windborne in the air and remains dry when it falls on snow. Only if the snow begins to melt does the dust become damp.
Re: a comment on Dark Everlasting by Sean Allen	9-Nov-04/11:09 AM
The second verse talks about shaking off praise, a hard thing to do, and often necessary. The last line seems contrary to that. I still think it's a good poem, and now you can shake that off too.
Re: a comment on Dark Everlasting by Sean Allen	9-Nov-04/11:05 AM
Because he's a teenager, and too many of them take it seriously.
Re: a comment on Beyond Love by Dovina	9-Nov-04/10:49 AM
I'm beginning to feel chased now, or is it chaste, but once again I do so much appreciate your interst.