Poemranker [20 most recent comments by Christof (181-200) and replies]

on Necromantic Boo-boo by razorgrin 8 Nov 2002, 1:18 AM

You goddam voodoo types and your lack of foresight. Always check with your local augury reader first.

on Perversions by razorgrin 8 Nov 2002, 1:16 AM

The last one is the best - to combine fisting with petty theft is truly a gift.

replying on Some Things by Christof 7 Nov 2002, 8:49 AM

I'm a silver-tongued devil, and no mistake

replying on Some Things by Christof 7 Nov 2002, 8:46 AM

I'll take that as a compliment, z.

replying on Some Things by Christof 7 Nov 2002, 8:26 AM

I wouldn't dare scrutuinize you, Mrs G. That would be most discourteous. You're lucky that you're in America where I can't see you!

replying on Returning by INTRANSIT 7 Nov 2002, 7:12 AM

No problem, my friend, always glad to be of assistance.

replying on Returning by INTRANSIT 7 Nov 2002, 6:23 AM

Look at m stuff and you'll see that i always think less is more! That new one I've posted today is the longest I've written in weeks. Anyway, looking at this I don't think it's a question so much of length as of tone. The last stanza seems to me just too hysterical-sounding. Perhaps if you opted for a less exalted diction e.g. 'I do not/don't deserve' not 'I deserve not' it would help. Trust your own ears though, not mine.

I don't deserve her kindness
or her pouring herself into me
but I can never stop her
because it doesn't belong to me.

Just a suggestion. Do with it as you wish.

replying on Returning by INTRANSIT 7 Nov 2002, 6:10 AM

No I didn't. I gather there was some controversy over some capitals - I can't comment on those!

on Returning by INTRANSIT 7 Nov 2002, 6:02 AM

I can see the Odysseus thing - allt he sailing and beacon images. I think i would finish after 'again, safe', although 'throwing my ribs/ at her feet' is good'. Perhaps hold that over for a separate poem entirely? It find this last stanza difficult because i appreciate why you want those emotions there, and it does complicate your homecoming in an interesting way, but I think your expression is just too fevered.

on Never Alone at Night by Limness 1 Nov 2002, 8:05 AM

This really is a poem of the night, all the dark longings and questionings that we don't want to face in the daylight. The last stanza and the final line are very moving indeed. I love this.

on SAMUEL by kliq 1 Nov 2002, 7:15 AM

Get the message, Samuel?

replying on The Funnyman by Christof 1 Nov 2002, 7:10 AM

I was thinking more Stan Boardman

replying on The Funnyman by Christof 1 Nov 2002, 6:54 AM

Thanks, that was the idea, glad it worked for you!

on Avetis by KilIluminati 1 Nov 2002, 2:47 AM

Is this translated from another language?

on the ultimate battle by teacup 1 Nov 2002, 2:42 AM

Yes this is pretty funny. Pizza always provokes turf wars

replying on St. Andrews University Marxist Society by Nicholas Jones 1 Nov 2002, 2:41 AM

I imagine msot people in the Labour Club were quite right wing anyway. You don't find a lot of Socialists in the Labour party any more.

on St. Andrews University Marxist Society by Nicholas Jones 1 Nov 2002, 2:36 AM

Well, if you are going to hang out at St Andrews what do you expect? Oxford was much the same. This is very wry.

on Slept by Nicholas Jones 1 Nov 2002, 2:34 AM

This happens to me all the time. Guitly conscience or something. Anyway, I recognise a fellow sufferer.

replying on Her Name Is Stella by Tascobar 30 Oct 2002, 8:23 AM

I'm sorry, but I can't have people being more excited by my brothers than they are by me. Sibling rivalry.

replying on Her Name Is Stella by Tascobar 30 Oct 2002, 8:15 AM

I have 2 brothers, both older than me. Both as bald as coots and with differing types of crankiness. Why that should excite you I can't imagine, they're not half as scintillating as me. Ahem.