Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.221	16-Jun-05/8:30 AM
We have no Autumn where I live. Thanks for the images.
Re: Auto-bio Poem by sacred_poet_me	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.221	16-Jun-05/8:28 AM
How are things at Michael Jackson's place these days?
Re: Don't be gay by wCUNTw	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.221	16-Jun-05/8:14 AM
If you feel up Perry Como Then you are a Necro-homo.
Re: Sisyphus' wife by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	16-Jun-05/4:13 AM
Shouldn't that be Sisyphus's Wife? If not, my 'Doris's off-day' needs a title revision... This poem? Totally incomprehensive to me.
Re: Between the Edges by woodstock20000	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.90	15-Jun-05/11:40 PM
Quite nice imagery/thoughts but as a poem it lacks, at least for me, that special something that elevates the language beyong prose.
Re: Yellow Am I by lil_evil_boi	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/9:42 PM
You make yellow sound so holy and powerful. Why did you choose yellow? Just out of curiosity. BTW...-8-
Re: Beach Volleyball by lil_evil_boi	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/9:40 PM
I dont know what to give you here. I think this poem is too simple and I think it needs more creativity. So I'll give you a 5. Not bad not good.
Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/9:38 PM
I love the repetition of the question and the yes. Also you've described each of autumn's personality really well. I think you deserve a -9-
Re: a comment on Auto-bio Poem by sacred_poet_me	sacred_poet_me 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/9:36 PM
Thx.
Re: a comment on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/9:11 PM
K. Thanks again~
Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	Gaiadok 69.61.226.6	15-Jun-05/8:52 PM
Perhaps there are a few that can be simplified into each other, but then again, maybe not. Maybe I just don't like the style as much as I do others, I'm not quite sure. Try reading it with thoughts of how to bring personalities together maybe? Or compare the personalities, instead of questioning each one individually. Your call
Re: a comment on Books by sacred_poet_me	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/7:49 PM
I agree.
Re: a comment on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/7:48 PM
Oh. Sorry..I didnt quite catch that. My apologies. As for the question/yes thing, what do you think about it? Do you think it would be better if I simplified it? But do you think the reader will understand each verse and knowing that they each represent autumn's unique characteristics and personalities?
Re: Auto-bio Poem by sacred_poet_me	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/7:48 PM
Descriptive and imaginative. Great. -8-
Re: a comment on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	Gaiadok 69.61.226.6	15-Jun-05/7:30 PM
Ah, you misunderstood me. Not the length of the poem itself, I liked that, I mean the question/yes thing. It's good, but perhaps too much of it. Oh well, as the writer, take it anyway you want with it, just a suggestion.
Re: a comment on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/7:22 PM
Thanks.
Re: a comment on The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/7:22 PM
Umm...i prefer it to be this long. But thanks for the suggestion. And glad you enjoyed it.
Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	Gaiadok 69.61.226.6	15-Jun-05/7:18 PM
Hmmm... I rather liked that actually. I believe the questions and yes answer got a bit repetitive, but I can see that was kind of the point as well. Perhaps there is a way to cut down on it? But, anyway, good job.
Re: The Magic Of Autumn by lil_evil_boi	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	15-Jun-05/7:14 PM
At the end I'm dying for a No. The poem in itself is not a bad idea and the phrasing is decorative.
Re: Impeccable mess by sk8rs_rule_all	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	15-Jun-05/7:08 PM
A textform as massive as a granite block. So popular, these days. So easy to write, too. >>I was once torn and you helped me<< >>I reach for the rope looking for a way out and you pulled me through<< No further comment.