poemranker ::Beach Volleyball by lil_evil_boi

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Free verse № 126872

Beach Volleyball

by lil_evil_boi

Member since 2005 · Posted 13 Jun 2005 · 7 comments

The beach-sand, sun, and sea. Castles and coolers and popside sticks. Seaweed, salt, sand everywhere. Crashing waves, laughing kids. A ball, striped like a rainbow, tossed.

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7 comments

[1] Bluemonkey 14-Jun-05/10:52 AM Reply
If you're any older that 7 or 8, this is terrible.
[7] untamed_fierce 14-Jun-05/4:20 PM Reply
Mediocre. Could be improved.
[n/a] deleted user 14-Jun-05/4:44 PM Reply
Sun and sand and salt and sea
Castles and coolers and flesh burned from bones
Sharpened popsickles and terrorist mermaids
Strangling seaweed and snipery squids
Tremor waves, grinning sharks
A beach boy's head, dripping red,
tossed over a net
[n/a] Dovina › deleted user 14-Jun-05/4:56 PM Reply
Shouldn't that be "Castles and coolers and tight bum flesh"?
[n/a] deleted user › Dovina 14-Jun-05/6:15 PM Reply
There are laughing kids around. You want this poem get slapped with an R-rating?
[n/a] deleted user › deleted user 14-Jun-05/6:24 PM Reply
No kidding (...) It keeps amazing me how Americans don't blink an eye when in movies people get literally cut in half but scream murder over a split second nipple on tv. A COVERED nipple. Europe's still hiccupping.
[5] sacred_poet_me 15-Jun-05/9:40 PM Reply
I dont know what to give you here. I think this poem is too simple and I think it needs more creativity. So I'll give you a 5. Not bad not good.