Re: a comment on Marriage by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.97	19-Oct-05/7:49 AM
I am not married, but if I decide to be so, I will take this position regardless of how he feels about it.
Re: Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac	Dovina 209.247.222.97	19-Oct-05/7:47 AM
Why the funky "late-" and "ly" on different lines? Maybe to stress your need for new vocabulary. Tongue-dance would be a good metaphor, but since you didn't use it, that gives me the right to steal it. Religion will give you a a scaffold of proper nouns, greetings, and expansive gestures, but then the sentence fumbles, as if the word-dance becomes a twisted twist.
Re: a comment on Marriage by Dovina	<~> 167.206.181.179	19-Oct-05/7:36 AM
are you married? if so, does he feel the same?
Re: a comment on Marriage by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.97	19-Oct-05/7:33 AM
Yes. Of course it’s perfectly legal to marry on whims of romance, giggles of puppy love, or to save a fetus. But it’s one-sided commitment that makes it last.
Re: a comment on Marriage by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.97	19-Oct-05/7:32 AM
Hear the Gospel According to Dovina and pray it’s not too late.
Re: a comment on Marriage by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.97	19-Oct-05/7:32 AM
Let’s consider the running and screaming right up front.
Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT	<~> 167.206.181.179	19-Oct-05/6:44 AM
the language here is quite intriguing, rich, and i agree with dovina that it took a while to work out that the sun was a different entity than the rooster, although that should be obvious. my question to you here is, do we only awaken once, or do we only awaken once as one of these things you mention?
Re: Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac	<~> 167.206.181.179	19-Oct-05/6:41 AM
I love this: I want to tell you I fear falling into religion and the scaffold of proper nouns, greetings, and expansive gestures - but the sentence seems convoluted to me, and i am not sure of your meaning. not that i need to be sure, it's jsut that i want a clearer reason for these bold statement to link in with that lasting, last image.
Re: Marriage by Dovina	<~> 167.206.181.179	19-Oct-05/6:37 AM
is that what you think marriage is about?
Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT	zodiac 217.144.7.195	19-Oct-05/3:18 AM
I don't totally get this yet, but the language and images are amazing. Happy loving.
Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT	zodiac 217.144.7.195	19-Oct-05/3:17 AM
Here and in a lot of places cheap, softwood butcher blocks chip. I think higher quality ones get thousands of extremely shallow cuts across the top and need to be sanded or planed to a new smooth surface.
Re: Marriage by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	19-Oct-05/3:14 AM
Spoken like someone not married.
Re: Marriage by Dovina	INTRANSIT 12.111.125.130	18-Oct-05/4:56 PM
Marriage a-la Jurrassic Park: Sure it's all oohs and ahhs now, Later there's running and screaming.
Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 12.111.125.130	18-Oct-05/3:56 PM
Ghazals look so easy but they're not. How does a butcher block wear then? They do wear. I'll work on the rest. Now? i need some. bleh.
Re: There is a journey tree by ALChemy	INTRANSIT 12.111.125.130	18-Oct-05/3:54 PM
I got here late. Add me to the barrage. However ,I like the dove/pigeon thing. The core is good. Lift that bale! Tote that barge!
Re: a comment on Figment by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.86	18-Oct-05/3:51 PM
I suppose you'd have to hold this letter, feeling its brutal impact, to see it as totally there and totally nonexistant at the same time.
Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT	Dovina 209.247.222.86	18-Oct-05/3:49 PM
Your premise: "We only awaken once" It took awhile to see the sun as one awakened thing, the rooster as another. But then you say "then," well, seems it should be "or" or something not implying two awakenings of the same thing. And the butcher block - chips? Oh, somebody must be constructing it, because they don't give off chips in normal use. Then I lose you when chips awaken as farmer and farm.
Re: Figment by Dovina	INTRANSIT 12.111.125.130	18-Oct-05/3:48 PM
A little thin but I get it. kinda.
Re: A Dark Account of History by D. $ Fontera	INTRANSIT 12.111.125.130	18-Oct-05/3:43 PM
Amen.
Re: a comment on How Angels Smell by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.86	18-Oct-05/3:38 PM
Okay, immitate British spelling if you think it adds good stuff: flavour, colour, odour. Just beware the errour, the tremour, the inferiour humour your apt to find here.