Re: a comment on Cold-Blooded Pillow by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	21-Jan-06/12:20 PM
ya, you guys are taking it way too literally...but I'm sure that's my fault for writing it poorly.
Re: a comment on a week off by hendrimike	Dovina 17.255.240.138	21-Jan-06/10:53 AM
Even though you removed my favorite line, I think that overall this is an improvement. Check the spelling.
Re: Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	21-Jan-06/4:54 AM
Like your new screen name.
Re: Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ecargo 172.144.185.27	20-Jan-06/9:38 PM
Gah! Line breaks. Fucking line breaks.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/7:44 PM
Honestly I don't remember being taught anything but lymerics in school.(sad, I know) I just remembered reading an article somewhere about how that's the way english teachers are doing it now. I do remember being taught metaphor, simile, etc. in school though.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	god'swife 71.103.98.44	20-Jan-06/6:23 PM
By the way, you should try submitting this. I'll read your others, right now I've got another engagement. Chiao.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	god'swife 71.103.98.44	20-Jan-06/6:20 PM
I have a terminal case of writer's block. That, along with my horror at reading my previous comments was enough to keep me away. When first I left, i'd check the site occasionally for anything worth reading, but we all know what a shot in the dark that is. I haven't visited the site in about 10 months. How serendipitous. The poem is good. "Sentinel teeth" has a complexity of meaning and it's placed wonderfully between bruising & fucking. (Oh how our bodies do betray us) It's an honest poem. I can feel it. It's human. "Trapped in tissue webs" is sensual, that along with the following line is spot on. Anatomically accurate and emotional all at once.
Re: a comment on May I Help by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.9.151	20-Jan-06/4:43 PM
http://edition.cnn.com/2006/SHOWBIZ/books/01/18/ew.books.selfmade/
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	zodiac 209.193.9.151	20-Jan-06/4:30 PM
You were taught free verse before rhymed/metered poetry? Really? I always thought I was taught rhymed/metered verse first because it's easier, you can talk about how a sonnet has 14 lines, iambs, trochees, all that jazz instead of sticky issues like theme or poems consisting of the word 'Poop' in the center of an unblemished piece of foolsclap.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/3:53 PM
Yes, I'm still mourning the loss of Rockmage.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/3:51 PM
"I've had eighteen straight whiskies, I think that's the record..." ~~ Dylan Thomas' last words. How could you not love a guy like that. Yeah, I think many english teachers make a mistake in teaching free verse before conventional poetry simply because it's easier. You must first learn to paint like Michelangelo before you can paint like Picasso. You've got a great foundation to build off from. I only wish you had a more comfortably addressable screen name.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Jan-06/3:43 PM
And some seem unfamiliar, even with comments going back several years, and only a few recent poems, as if maybe they changed their usernames and perhaps deleted the older poems. Okay to turn over a new leaf, but who are they?
Re: a comment on May I Help by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/3:26 PM
Damn, you ruined it. And I was almost there too.
Re: a comment on May I Help by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Jan-06/3:24 PM
Yes, but his tutu couldn't keep it all in. Please don't die, so few understand.
Re: a comment on Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/3:23 PM
Anytime. I was looking at some of your other stuff. You've got quite a range.
Re: a comment on May I Help by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/3:18 PM
OK, now tell me you were making out with a cheerleader at the time and I'll die a happy man. (Sorry, couldn’t resist.)
Re: Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Jan-06/3:16 PM
Where's she been. I miss getting slapped around.
Re: a comment on May I Help by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	20-Jan-06/3:12 PM
I was a transvestite in a Van Heusen shirt and pants that could have been men’s, legally covered, and wondering why everyone should not wear what he wishes.
Re: Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/3:07 PM
Well I never! At least not from that end. I'm not that happy with the layout though. Play with it for a while(pun-alert!) and see what comes out. Like: My tongue's loose slide would soon let slip this truth, bruise-blue, kept fast behind these sentinal teeth. We meet, touch, fuck; we seldom speak much more than surface gloss. From niceties to wordless heat we move. Here with your big hand warm on my neck, I swallow words thick with promise, glistening like larva trapped in tissue webs, a palate ridged as a whale's. I'd consume you whole, take you deep, sliding soft as a worm, down down in a sudden gasp.
Re: Everything is Nothing by Donne With Life	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Jan-06/2:40 PM
Here's a 10. Don't kill yourself.