Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	16-Feb-06/7:03 AM
If your not that guy who's been logging in with mock names like "zodlac" then you have real bad timing or you are apparently a big fan of him.
Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	16-Feb-06/6:53 AM
Well, we've got our suspect.
Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	16-Feb-06/6:25 AM
If you have to hold on to it then it ain't faith.
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	16-Feb-06/6:19 AM
He doesn't exist outside this poem but I'm sure he resembles quite a few people. I like the character you've made.
Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	16-Feb-06/6:15 AM
You colossal cunt. "stealing usernames?"
Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	16-Feb-06/5:52 AM
Here's a haiku: Jerk steals user names calling people gay alot- Leaves fuck you comments.
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-Feb-06/3:53 AM
Dovina, this is excellently written, but a bit long. I can't really see anything that needs removing though, maybe I'm just impatient today.
Re: a comment on Mentally Disabled by drnick	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-Feb-06/3:50 AM
Nonsense poems are the greatest. Just change 'thru' to 'through', because this is easily a nine!
Re: Stealth Assassin (draft) by Mona Lisa	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-Feb-06/3:47 AM
There's potential here, although I don't like stanzas 4 and 6. You could do well bringing out the sort of taint on the love (as you do in the last stanza) more, I think. As it's a draft I'll hold rating it for when it's edited.
Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined	Adriaan 198.54.202.18	15-Feb-06/10:54 PM
here goes: http://raysweb.net/senryu/definitions.html - definitions http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Senryu - definition + examples http://members.optushome.com.au/kazoom/poetry/senryu.html - examples http://members.tripod.com/~Startag/HkSenDiff.html - dfifference between Haiku and Senryu
Re: a comment on Mentally Disabled by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	15-Feb-06/10:24 PM
I wanted to write something that made very little sense. In part to show how easy it is(at least for me) to get caught up in literary devices and rhyming schemes and loose all meaning. The first line alludes to that(in music, some say you loose something in the transition from analog to digital). The other part, if it works right, is to show that if you look too closely at anything you'll find it more complex than it really is. The last two lines refer to that. When I wrote this I imagined that more intelligent people would be confused and angry over the nonsense it feeds you, while the "mentally disabled" would enjoy it for its simple pleasures. Jesus, I'm writing a novel about what this thing means...let me sum it up: This is here to fuck with you.
Re: a comment on A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.88	15-Feb-06/9:57 PM
I mean you are not the protagonist, because your religion is based of firmer ground.
Re: a comment on A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.88	15-Feb-06/9:52 PM
Thanks for the kudos, but I have no power to get drunk on. Shiraz, however, is always with me.
Re: Mentally Disabled by drnick	Dovina 67.72.98.88	15-Feb-06/9:49 PM
Sounds like a lyrical hodgepodge of uncertainty and frustration. Am I missing some theme?
Re: a comment on A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.88	15-Feb-06/9:42 PM
Well, it definitely isn't you. May your suspicions lead to thorough investigation.
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	15-Feb-06/9:35 PM
Who is the inspiration behind this poem?
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	drnick 24.176.22.254	15-Feb-06/9:24 PM
This is really good! This might be my favorite poem I've read from you, and quite possibly your best. My only warning: do not get drunk with your power; that is what liquor is for.
Re: a comment on Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.88	15-Feb-06/8:52 PM
If I had not missed death, I would not have written this, and would not be afraid. "I had not missed death" is evaluable by true or false. I chose true. Would you say that such statements are symbols in reality,or are they trifles about words?
Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	15-Feb-06/8:12 PM
Pray a little more, buddy, and then you won't be too weak to hold onto faith. Come on, be a man, you can do it!
Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	15-Feb-06/8:09 PM
Your a wise man Al, your a wise man!