Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	12-Feb-07/2:59 PM
Well ok, if it gives you a laugh and mild itch for a smelly stableboy, then fine by me. Actually, you folks are all taking this way more erotically than I am. Admittedly, there’s suggestion in having your finger clasped in huge, work-rough hand, but wow, does it have to imply all this?
Re: a comment on AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104	12-Feb-07/1:53 PM
Or to compel you to vigorously thrash me. I've really missed you DA, my faithful private investigator.
Re: a comment on self-suffocation by Phalkon	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104	12-Feb-07/1:50 PM
PS- I have never told anyone that they'll never be as good as me. I in no way make claim to be a poet worthy of others aspiring to write "as I do", and never I claimed or happened to have always written top-notch stuff. But I do claim to be engaged in a continued effort to improve and stengthen my abilities, in the hopes of becoming a writer of a "professional" and skilled sort. You happen to be displacing your own thoughts as mine, when it's actually your insecurity forming dejected conclusions within your subconcious. [In other words, stop putting words in my mouth. It's much more effective to quote the things I actually do say, rather than coming up with your own reinterpretations.]
Re: a comment on self-suffocation by Phalkon	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104	12-Feb-07/1:34 PM
I never said at any point that "You would never be as good a writer as I am.", you fucking dolt. I simply said that this recent post of yours, and most likely the previous ones, suck ass and lack any real effort and/or forethought. Like I said before, and try actually reading what I'm saying: You can sit there and be a lowly crustacean in the throes of your embrowning, resigned to the foul poopdeck of RankerVille... OR You can start actually attempting to write something with skill and consideration, rather than spewing emotionally crippled, teenaged puke, and embarrassing yourself. Who knows, maybe if you actually tried to write better, you'd be better than me. Except that the attitude & stupidity you're emanating tends to give one the impression that, you don't posses the spine or determination to do anything well; it seems that you'd rather settle for mediocre dribble. Pity, isn't it?
Re: a comment on Ode to a Pimple-Lyric Spawned by Phalkon's Greasy Face. by SupremeDreamer	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104	12-Feb-07/1:10 PM
You've evolved to using two word phrases to explain your reasoning. There's hope for you yet, perhaps. Just curious, what's the other half of your genetic make-up? Fascist perhaps?
Re: a comment on Fuck Shelters, & fuck OutReach Court. by SupremeDreamer	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104	12-Feb-07/1:02 PM
Are you a modifed clone of Rockmage, designed to fit his previouse zero bombing behaviour towards me in the past? Is there a particular reason for the seemingly indiscriminate zeros? Perhaps there's something you'd like to verbalize, like maybe an ingenious reason why my poem(s) in question warrant your recent zero(s). Or then again, you can just sit there and provide single word statements that are of no constructive value, and far from being delineative in any way, shape, or form. In short, stop being a coward who avoids any sort of bold discourse, you inarticulate cad.
Re: The Ballad of Andy Thomas (A True Story) by Rakesh Rajani	ecargo 167.219.88.140	12-Feb-07/12:14 PM
ace rhyming of pitch and six.
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	ecargo 167.219.88.140	12-Feb-07/12:11 PM
LOL--the mind wobbles at the thought. I'd like to know what other purpose a 10-inch dildo might serve? (Not saying I have one, but if I did, might I use it as . . . a doorstop maybe?)
Re: Captured by Dovina	ecargo 167.219.88.140	12-Feb-07/12:10 PM
Good lord, step away from your gramma's soft core porn. " . . . held huskily in fluted flesh . . ." LOL! How does one hold something "huskily"? (Being a "weaker vessel," I guess mah sens-a-bilities are jes' a little tendah.) I feel a little dirty, as if I should have changed my pantaloons after watchin' the big, strong stableboy shovel out the stall ('cause surely some shit was being slung). The focus on the hand is pretty good, but the rest borders on pre-sexual-emancipation bad-romance-novel cliche.
Re: The Ballad of Andy Thomas (A True Story) by Rakesh Rajani	Ranger 81.103.124.179	12-Feb-07/11:54 AM
"He proved as popular at school as a quick glass of AIDS" is the greatest -=Dark_Angel=- tribute line I think I've ever seen. -10-! And for the Warhammer reference you get double AIDS. -10- -20-
Re: Celui by half.italian	Ranger 81.103.124.179	12-Feb-07/11:46 AM
I don't think you need anything beyond the third line.
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	12-Feb-07/10:33 AM
You pooor dear!
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	12-Feb-07/10:32 AM
No, if properly used, they sometimes serve their intended purpose. You guys are taking this poem along unpaved paths and unintended passages.
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	12-Feb-07/10:31 AM
Baby, this is the real thing!
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.86.162	12-Feb-07/10:31 AM
It’s the big paw that entices strong hand ideas for the narrator. If you like little paws with shiny nails, then go for it from that angle. No need for ickiness either way.
Re: A Cautionary Tale by Tman	richa 81.179.135.216	12-Feb-07/10:16 AM
I don't think it works putting your rhyming words on a seperate line. It makes the poem sound like Father Ted's 'my lovely horse'. Also sleep does not fill one's head.
Re: self-suffocation by Phalkon	richa 81.179.135.216	12-Feb-07/10:07 AM
and your English teacher just laughed. :(
Re: Captured by Dovina	richa 81.179.135.216	12-Feb-07/10:05 AM
It's ok. The whole little paw entices strong hand idea is relatively interesting. It's just I don't know kind of icky.
Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina	richa 81.179.135.216	12-Feb-07/10:02 AM
other purposes! Like a whisk.
Re: The Ballad of Andy Thomas (A True Story) by Rakesh Rajani	Bethy 165.154.46.103	12-Feb-07/9:58 AM
A true story? WOW! I think we all have gone to school with an "Andy" Sad but a good poem/story. :) Bethy