<{Baba^Yaga}>
on some deleted poem
1 Aug 2004, 8:59 PM
Booger
Blobby blob
Great
Splendid!
That was fickle
Shoot 'im.
that's nice sonnet ..really
Nice picture of the ordinary.
ha ha ha haaaa!!! that's fucking swit.
Did you want this to be just a bit pimply?
Scary,fun.
Reality tv in a warm pair of spandex.
"Like I remember John Lennon's music and
Forget Yoko."
that's a great line.
and the last one too.
better saying for that is this below
Despairing seed into this depth of earth that is the arm of chaos
"wispears" highly original, totally moronic.
This is the best pimple poem ever!!! But wait?
What's this!!! You're serious!...? What a tit.
I believe it is spelled keeriste, making the "i" long. Otherwise it sounds like keerispy cream or something.
She's forgotten the tale of the cross for sure. Good analogy.
A good thoughtful ramble.
Line 1, do you mean "your teeth"?
Might want to reconsider, "Whose money runs your immortality?" It throws in a new thought, maybe not needed. And if it's a sonnet, might want to reconsider the indentation and line break.
I think it would be stronger if some lines were omitted. Try leaving these out:
Your in command,
no longer theirs,
are yours for your delights,
yours are the only ones you hear,
no complaints on how you good you are,
its like your the only one here,
The best ever
Fuzz, so I read about those sky islands you guys have there in those mountains of Arizona, fascinating.
The marketing campaign is working, I think. I hate you less and less.
But is your keyboard broken or something?