Last line is a bit of a disappointment. I know; it's a haiku. Nevertheless, nevertheless...

I don't think haiku should have something to give away. The universe is not to be tricked. Then again, I don't have a real taste for haiku. They're a bit like sushi to me - I'll aways look around for more.

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hi and lo..dead air.. ear to the floor. I hope everyone gets it.

So you were shown a guy's hotdog. How many 'poems' did you write about this earth-shattering event?

Where does the ransom come into it?

The first verse is good. The rest is rather confusing.

Edge is such an unlikely ending, but I keep hoping. Maybe a person should just get used to tails fifty percent of the time.

I always wondered how to get seven beats in the second line. Now I know.

How about "Moving to the light"? Strange how rockmage votes, and how often.

A good idea. I think it would be better to leave "me" out of it after the first two verses.

"slake" is not a good word to use there. Also, get rid of "About her person." I'd try, "About her body" or something else. And I plain just don't understand the part about being "robbed painfully of darkness" that only makes sense to a vampire. It needs a little explaining, for the rest of us.

I can't get over -birds of down-. Incredible.

Coin toss called on account of rain.

Here's another example: http://tinyurl.com/cc7va

<< i, u >> Ah, Homo Communicata in all his splendor. If you really feel the need to use chat language, be consistent and avoid the old-fashioned 'you' and 'too' altogether.

It's my turn for incomprehension... Not so fond of dialogues in poetry. These segments also lack compositor(i)al harmony. You're one of a few PR's who show a feel for harmony (bâââhh, old-fashioned!) and do more than just sweep together a collection of words that bite each other. Yes I know, it's the temporary way...

Have an Alexander Hamilton.

Oooh....you touch my ta la la....(ooooh) my ding ding dong...

YOU TOUCH MY TRA LA LA, MY DING DING DONGGGGGGGGGGGGG