Re: Art serves a Purpose by i_am_the_popsicle	Bethy 24.222.32.240	24-Aug-05/3:42 PM
nice...:) Bethy
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	24-Aug-05/5:26 PM
Sometimes it's what we don't know that makes a poem work.
Re: My question is...... by Annie	LatinQueen 70.50.105.127	25-Aug-05/12:30 AM
Reading this, has made me realized that its sooo true..where is that mudda..anywho, i give this a ten and 3 quarters..muhahah
Re: untitled by LatinQueen	Bethy 24.222.32.239	25-Aug-05/4:52 AM
simply said...good poem...:)Bethy *8*
Re: My question is...... by Annie	Bethy 24.222.32.239	25-Aug-05/4:56 AM
circle of life...wish we could do something about it...it is a sad life at times...and it is also a joyous one too...good poem...:)Bethy
Re: With You at an Ancient Temple by Sasha	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	25-Aug-05/8:56 AM
I read this several times to be sure I got the most out of it. Thank you for your time, Sasha.
Re: My question is...... by Annie	Sasha 68.49.8.49	25-Aug-05/9:36 AM
This poem doesen't tell me anything besides what I've heard a thousand times. If you must do so, and it's okay if you do, then please, please use less outworn language. "Savior" for example needn't be here. You repeat yourself over and over and over. Say something more!!!
Re: UNTITLED by deuce0420	bellafuego 199.77.249.2	25-Aug-05/9:49 AM
"necver"?
Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	25-Aug-05/10:00 AM
My dear it's merely a matter of T's and D’s. You can choose to be chaste or choose to be chased but rarely is a woman both of these for most men are lead from their waist.
Re: Dear Lord, by INTRANSIT	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	25-Aug-05/10:25 AM
The last line might need an extra syllable I'm not sure but try sounding it out with "mankind's tide".
Re: i was an ass by hendrimike	bellafuego 199.77.249.2	25-Aug-05/10:59 AM
wow that's the kind of one night stand you can see on an abc drama.
regarding some deleted poem...	Quarton 12.217.202.34	25-Aug-05/11:18 AM
rockmage, Did I do something to piss you off? You went through all my poems and gave each a zero. They can't be that bad, can they? Oh well, at least you were consistent and also, used your name rather than anonymous. This poem is pretty good. kind of humorous and surely original in its content. Your old buddy, Quarton
Re: untitled by LatinQueen	bellafuego 199.77.249.2	25-Aug-05/11:33 AM
i think mariah's verse is "we can make a million promises"
Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego	Bethy 24.222.32.230	25-Aug-05/1:13 PM
I have said it a thousands times...Life is the longest thing we have! good poem...:) Bethy
Re: i was an ass by hendrimike	Bethy 24.222.32.230	25-Aug-05/1:15 PM
one nighters look just like that...lol :) Bethy
Re: orange crumble by impert&ent	impert&ent 80.195.201.212	25-Aug-05/11:59 PM
after tanks(4) http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=129826
regarding some deleted poem...	impert&ent 80.195.201.212	26-Aug-05/12:14 AM
Is this really free verse? Mostly very good. I think you could do better with the last line. It's too trite for the rest of the poem. Overall, I like the way you've managed the transition from affectionate domesticity to shocked betrayal. I can see why you'd then focus on the feelings of disbelief, but I don't think you've captured it so well. The last two stanzas are not so powerful as those preceding, and the last line doesn't do justice to any of what came before. There's got to be more going on in your tangled thoughts and feelings. I was hoping to hear more.
Re: Tarragon by D. $ Fontera	impert&ent 80.195.201.212	26-Aug-05/12:24 AM
Nice evocations of cooking throughout - but for the line about hips. So I'm thinking of a substitute for chassés that involves a stirring, a rolling, a grinding.
Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego	7!3 218.208.211.250	26-Aug-05/4:06 AM
nice :)
Re: Wrapping a Gift by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.227	26-Aug-05/5:12 AM
I happen to be listening right now to a song with one of the sexiest lines I know: - So go outside in the desert heat, get your dress all wet and send it to me. My suggestion: White cotton panties and nothing else.