Go on then, a 7 for sheer whimsy!

A most enjoyable read, thank you. I might suggest that "Boom box in the sky" is rather cliché, but that's just my humble opinion.

This is brilliant, just brilliant

I assume the translation is as good as it reads. The poeme's 50-50 on the ace/turd spectrum though.

Legend

Good poem. It has a nice flow and the "ride" is one of life itself expressed through riding your bike. I really do like this and the message it contains.

'My mitts are hermits' is great, if only it wasn't for the final line...this would be ace. Word inversion works sometimes but when the rest of the poeme is in a straightforward structure it's like a punch in the colon.

breath should be breathe. A good metaphor, but somewhat repetitive, and a bit too obvious. It doesn't work well in a sonnet as written, free verse maybe.

This is more like a diary entry in verses. I don't think there's anything wrong with that per se, but it needs to be delivered in either an interesting or easyflowing manner - I hate to say this but rhymes would do the trick here. It feels like you've gone for straight iambic meter but I think it needs more than that. Either that or some truly staggering imagery throughout.

lol

Cut this down into simple iambic pentameter. That way you'll be able to tidy it easily. It's not an original idea within this, but then, who said poetry has to always be novel?

Ranger is right - the last line inversion sucks. The internal rhymes of Verse 1 are nice.

Kipling does single mother moral poetry? Tighten up the metrics and this will be perfectly readable, I'd say.

Cute, richa's right about the last line though. Pick something less bland to say.

Best thing I've read on here in ages.

May I make another suggestion? Keep the internal rhymes going throughout, they work well in the first stanza. And be prepared for people to read 'My hands brave the Winter's groin'.

I liked most of this except for stanza 4

I think the second verse changes the metre a bit but that is not necessarily a problem.

The abused light is an intriguing word choice but the reader is not let in why you think it is appropriate. I like the again grain rhyme. Some of the others are a little obvious.

A grammar deviant appears to have doctored your poeme to include the word whereas several times for no good reason. The second verse is good.