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on Nicole by sliver
17 Oct 2003, 8:26 PM
Was "the light at the end of the tunnel" a bullet firing? Such cowardice. I liked the last stanza best, the third one leaves me wondering if you just need to get out with your consoling friends - eat some weasel, tastes like wabbit. Nicole's a bitch - get over her - get on with it. Emotional otherwise.
I want to bookmark this! YES!!! On Flanders Field, But so much more. I'm going to read this a few more times, but for now 10.10.Love it.Lets hold discussion night on this. Why my stain, my son?Stain of blood, yes I understand. But the context really leaves that open. The internal images I get are the survivors coated with the blood of the wounded, as they try to help. I can't tell you how much I love this one. Thanks, Hope to see it as #1 real soon.
Youall are sick. SICK! have you no respect. Probably not.
I refuse to comment on the content, But I can feel every line. Well written.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:48 PM
Great Poem "sliver" and i forgot to tell you on the 16th !! Sorry :) 28? wow..... :)
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:51 PM
Electroman: How come you are SO much better at this then me? Huh? great poem MORE MORE MORE :)
WHAT!!! May that candle never even dim> For both you, and me , And Him. May we forever feel that heat'
Let us never taste defeat. Love your work, It fills me with peace, May these exquisite writings never cease.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 8:57 PM
Happy Birthday!!!! Fabulous poetry, as usual!
Slow down with that fancy click and paste thing you've got going. I really like this one, but I see Kaolin didn't care for those ten page prose submissions. I must admit it was even hard for me to read through them, and I like you more than all of them.Keep it simple, some of us are slow.
The second time reading through aloud, the outrage came through strong and hard, ready to erupt.
WOW, for a second I thought this was about me. SIGH. Well done. How are you special enough even with a poem wanker award, to submit 4???? at a time?
Well! I like it. (Yuor incessant blabber that is) but that prose seems to have struck a note. I often write about not being able to write, Inspiration huh?
Now I see why you have 12 hits and only 2 comments. Grow up!
Happy Birthday slightly delayed!!!
I'll be 56 in a couple of months. Things don't change. Smiling is best. I can't always do that.
Does this mean Hell's fire is getting dimmer?
This fits the lyric category. Read it a couple of times out loud. The music is there.
You are here. You are one of us. I question that every day. I just lost an Annie to something,I'm not sure. I wish that walking a mile in your sodden shoes could bring you back. I would show you the truth.Perhaps you might see it?
Like a groom to his/her virgin wife on wedding night, nervousness before the consummation..
Simply and well said.