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Nicole (Lyric) by sliver My heart has been shattered and broken
Lost in shadows blacker than coal
But a light at the end of that tunnel
Guided me out of that hole.
Now I lie her torn and bleeding
I'd need a miracle to make me whole.
So I subject myself to your mercy;
Will you come back and love me Nicole?
I know there's a pretty good chance
That you've already found happiness.
But until I'm in your arms
I'm afraid I'll never know such bliss.
My one and only weapon
To hold back the worst of the pain
Were memories of my love for you
And those will forever remain.
Up the ladder:
The Serpent People
Down the ladder:
between you and me there is nothing
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Posted: October 17, 2003 7:57 PM PDT; Last modified: October 17, 2003 7:57 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.674969 Overall Rank: 2004 Comments:
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electroman1979 @ 64.12.96.46
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17-Oct-03/8:03 PM
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great poem, i can feel the emotion, keep up the good work 10
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sliver @ 65.178.200.200
> electroman1979
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17-Oct-03/8:09 PM
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Who knew you were here tonight too. Thanks man.I'll submit another in a few.
Was "the light at the end of the tunnel" a bullet firing? Such cowardice. I liked the last stanza best, the third one leaves me wondering if you just need to get out with your consoling friends - eat some weasel, tastes like wabbit. Nicole's a bitch - get over her - get on with it. Emotional otherwise.
Actually I knew her in like 7th grade or something. But she's REEEALLY hot now. Need to get back in touch. Anyway, I'm over it. Just memories dribbled onto paper with a little added emotion.
Reeally?
Good poem Sliver, You like Electroman are both SO much better then me! - 10 of course
bratsy, you are very good, It runs in the family. Don't be disappointed if my poems are perfect{LAUGH}.Keep it up, I really enjoy everything you've let me read.
Well if that's just "added" emotion...umm.. you're good at adding emotion lol
heart crushing
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