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on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2003, 1:22 PM
Beware the Brick!
Bleu... I firmly agree with your sound stance on these most serious of subjects. I know first hand the tribulations and suffering that compounds one's ability to deal with reality while in the grips of denial. See, last week, my baboon came down with ebola Bleu, and the economy of my third world island? Collapsed, not to mention my poor perfect 90 year old grandmother is not perfect anymore since she caught aids from a botched hair transplant. Bleu, you are a poet and wise to fight the system so. You are a super trooper young man. A super! trooper. I however am drunk and moments away from being shot in front of a firing squad for squandering my peoples assets and fornicating with their livestock and sons and daughters. Forgive me Bleu.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on You'd sell more hats, mugs, and shirts if they said... by Shardik
19 Oct 2003, 1:44 PM
MEDIOCRITY CODE: 30C90421
http://www.mycgiserver.com/~prawne/medio cre.jsp
The first verse is quite good. Shut up about your fucking pans.
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Truly shit.
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A writer's block poeme! How exciting and novel!!
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Okay, but just to let you know, I'm a girl. ;)
So, so perfect.
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Super Duper
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I like the first stanza as it flows around strangeness and a subtle rhyme.
I just have nary an idea of what the hell this is about. Was he doing something his pans becuase it rhymes with hands??
defending against, maybe?
it may be disjointed, but were you smoking 'dis joint, or a fatter one??
who is James - who are you, and why do I have to read about either of you??
"bequeeth" is "ea", but I think you meant "beseech", unless you were saying it as he might, presumably as wrongly as you? No idea.
to eath his own.
very nice.
A little klang, some nice mirrored sounds, unusual wordings - excellent.
I enjoyed this poeme so much that I read the whole thing.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on You'd sell more hats, mugs, and shirts if they said... by Shardik
19 Oct 2003, 3:54 PM
P.S If you are suggesting that -=Dark_Angel=- has been voting on his own poemes in a mindless attempt to top the best list you are mistaken. Nevertheless, I do get the feeling that as of late *somebody* has been smearing my felchings with more than their fair share of anonymous votes. I do not know who. But even if I had been voting on my own secretions (which I haven't), that would merely add to the credibilty of my scores because my voting algorithm is about ten times less wrong and stupid than the average poemeranker's.
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Damn! I don't want to be there!