Great ending!

I think this title is great...

Thanks for the comments!

i enjoyed this more than anything i have read here in months. thank you. only one line interfered with my pleasure: "That it's them sing (not me)," i thing should be reanimated to: It's them that sing, (not me),

I have DSL, but my provider really sucks, i get booted way too often.

Okay - this is close to something very good, but the articles, conjunctions and prepositions nearly outnumber everything else. Really interrupts the flow of lovely imagery and a deeper concept, IMHO.

Again, I like it as is. It took me two worthwhile reads. the end.

what the hell...i enjoyed it

this struck a chord with me...a good one.

I think it's very brave of you to write such a personal poem.

the sadness carries well here; a nice clean portrayal of a relateable emotion.

Nice ending, i'd work on the rest however.

Cursing someone to ooze. That's a new one.

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i give you a 10 as long as u promise to share........ :)

None of you are a match for this master of spoken stupidity. I have an off brown belt in martial farts.

Drugs are for weaklings.

An improvement.

Too hive a trip for me.

Betrayal... continual or just happening?