I wish i lived in your world. So fluffy and fuzzy. hehe. I like the structure and flow of this one.

'for her son, for the nude young male who lounges against a rock displaying his dildo ... whose works are but extensions of power to charm? From this weathered outcrop' Auden knew about the rise of the limestone too. This is quite cute, very readable, the end is plain daft though. Like the funny names too

good rhythm I think. Acid does not ache you though, it burns. In fact acid rain is too weak to do much at all, dissolve gravestones slowly perhaps.

Rich, I like this. It has a nice touch but I must admit that I am not clearly capturing the image you paint. I am somewhat lost from "to give reason....." "as if to quell the stillness of the day" is sweet, very nice. Are you saying that the lake exists for more than mere show and if so what might that be?

very good, little else to say.

Good "slice of life."

Some very memorable lines, good poem. Strong ending.

Strikes me as pretentious in part- Not clear about the meaning of many of the lines.

Dealing with a heavy subject, but in a very silly way. Oh Well!

Cutesy! I enjoyed it!

The real feeling comes through. It comes across as a bit trite, but still heart-felt.

Interesting use of the platitude about if enough monkeys were to type long enough, sooner or later one would write Shakespeare.

Cutesy.

A bit too dogmatic for my taste, but I give you points for staying on track with your theme throughout the whole poem.

I'm not sure what's more interesting, the flow, structure, depth, simplicity, or the votes and comments. hehe. Good piece.

There we go...voila! note to self; ease up on the absinthe, bonehead!

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I was enjoying it until you let out that stinker at the end. Woooooh that was a beany one ˙

too long for my ADD sufferin ass...but I like the first few lines. ;-)

SCHWEEEEEEEEEEEEET! I LOVE this poem. The flow, the vocab, the forward thrusting cadence. 10!