| Re: Bookshop girls by Stephen Robins |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
23-May-07/2:54 AM |
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Have you been in a charity shop recently?
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richa 85.210.15.203 |
23-May-07/3:12 AM |
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This is an ace argument for the Iraq war.
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| Re: Four and a half paragraphs of silence by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
23-May-07/6:01 AM |
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Rejoice and praise ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
His face is ace, his touch imperious,
He makes buxom young women delirious,
No! of course I'm not being serious!
?-Dave_Mysterious-? well done on relogging in after four years, just one other thing - could you file a patent for this ill-conceived contraption I invented as a panacea for all domestic chores?
http://tinyurl.com/2yfdzj
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jessicazee 24.160.240.223 |
24-May-07/6:58 AM |
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Wal-Mart demolished my childhood mini-golf course.
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| Re: The wreck of a Memphis-Atlanta Greyhound by zodiac |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
24-May-07/2:05 PM |
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Good grief, how have I missed this until now?
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Skamper 202.6.130.139 |
24-May-07/11:04 PM |
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rhythmic, as it should be...
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Skamper 202.6.130.139 |
24-May-07/11:12 PM |
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This is either very clever - or just too easy...can't decide yet.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Ranger 81.103.124.179 |
26-May-07/11:15 AM |
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| Re: surgical spite by calliope |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/11:50 AM |
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i'd be curious to hear the music to this.
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| Re: C. by skaskowski |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/11:54 AM |
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i liked, "A spider-web like music staff/ crawled across your safety glass." I'm not sure how this all relates to a central theme, though it seems to be describing some aspect of an automobile accident. i don't like "a raving hypocrite" or "a rampart of regrets" - i understand why they're there, but i'd say those moments of reflection interrupt the flow you've developed in the rest of the poem.
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| Re: hopscotch rocks by FreeFormFixation |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/11:57 AM |
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breath of fresh air is cliche. so is live in the now.
other than those blips, this is an evocative series of images.
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nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/11:59 AM |
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is the misspelling of whoopie and condalezza intentional? funny and fun to read.
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| Re: Fighting For Peace (is like) by Skamper |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:01 PM |
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Fire starter/ Oil for barter - great line!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:02 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:07 PM |
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| Re: Glossary without an index by daniella |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:16 PM |
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you have some beautiful imagery in this, but there are also some atrocious phrasing choices and grammatical errors that interrupt your flow. final stanza is superb. this could be SO much better with a little proofreading.
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| Re: Ode to Jack by Skamper |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:48 PM |
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chained in their vanity? i don't think that phrase works where it is. otherwise clever and thought-provoking. I like the rhythm.
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| Re: The Ascent by somemorepoetry |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:50 PM |
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don't ditch your language use, just add a few more specific details to complete the image.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:53 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
nypoet22 74.225.66.5 |
26-May-07/12:58 PM |
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