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surgical spite (Lyric) by calliope
Avert your eyes, and a wolf may snatch the sparrow from the sky as she flies by singing your song. You've got to try to shape your words in such a way that they grind like knives out through your teeth. And stab the wolf. He hungers for silence. He hungers. Don't feed him anything. Just stab that wolf in the heart. And if he dies, your thoughts were worth enough to blot the sky in a swirl of surgical spite. Go on and try. Shape every word in such a way that it grinds like knives out through your teeth. To stab the wolf. Let the hilts roll from your tongue, stain the soot red at your feet. Grind down the blades til they're dull. Cuz you know they'll still stab just as deep.

Up the ladder: the true path of love
Down the ladder: Abba

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7924
Posted: May 26, 2007 10:10 AM PDT; Last modified: May 26, 2007 10:10 AM PDT
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[8] nypoet22 @ 74.225.66.5 | 26-May-07/11:50 AM | Reply
i'd be curious to hear the music to this.
[7] Skamper @ 202.6.128.2 | 29-May-07/5:55 AM | Reply
I get the feel of emo - but the cuz in the last line doesn't fit with the rest of the write. You could lose it and keep with the darkness, it lightens the write too much - almost childish.
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