I'm not sure surrounding words with -___- emphasises them. Rather it stops the poeme dead, as the reader attempts to figure out what you are doing.

You sound like a real catch!!

This used to have a cool little off kilter structure but the poemranker submit box would'nt let me do it....stupid poemranker submit box.....

"The day after the end of the castless world" -- can you explain what this means?

Sorry, castless should be cast-e-less. But the current meaning could be interpreted as if the world was devoid of people, or its "cast."

Well, no I dont my father is not the best but I wouldnt wish to have a new one for he wouldnt be any better.What this meant to me was that maybe one day I would wake up to the father who was the man he once was and not the drugy he is.And every day is a drive with a stranger so I wouldnt feel bad if i had to take one.

saw the original typed way, very cool man. The poem is a great to think about things

Hey, I wanted you to know I thought this was a really well-written lyric reminiscent of the ______ian ramblings of Mr _______ with some clever half-rhymes too, but it's my policy to give any poem which refers to suicide an automatic zero. The reason I do this is that have good reason to believe that ninety-nine percent of suicidals are just attention-grubbing whiners who think they're fucking Kurdnt Kobbayne or Sylvia Plath and that giving them pity, praise, or any kind of attention at all only encourages their self-aggrandizing gothic tendencies. You say, what the fuck do you know, you fucking asshole? or something along those lines. To which I say, I know more people who've successfully (and unsuccessfully) committed suicide than you, and I've gotten sick to death of it. Don't come barking up my tree on this, I have rabies. Good day.

please. go someplace else with this crap.

This provocative twist is a bit disgusting, but so is the movie. Too much truth here; think I'll look away.

I know what you are doing...

Have a 5 just because I don't know what you are talking about or how it relates to the title.

Sadly, like Zodiac, I beklieve you could have cut the last four lines or so. "Windy sculptor" just doesn't sit. But otherwise the language is lively and engaging.

I find the Poemranker submit box, and most everything else about the site, very conducive to our craft, given http limitations. I'm with you on this right up to "compressed thoughts." It seems to be saying that journaling is a good thing, which many of us think it is. Second to living, it's quite satisfying.

Foresake should be Forsake. I'm a little muddy on 'the polite case', but I'm sure you mean something by it. I would like to see you put a different punctuation after 'up' and eliminate the 'for' afterward. Though when I read it it sounds good. I find it reads better with a comma after faked and no 'and' before 'worn'. See what you think. 'At your heart, a poor gown' is the weakest line and should be re-written. The last lines are really strong arresting etc, but I wonder if there's a better word to put in the place of 'worth'. The form seems to work pretty well. You might consider putting some space in every couple of lines, though. I don't know, play around and see what you think.

I like the former title better.

I love it, crazy story huh?

u got some guts, again, a great poem

Been there.