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Ravings of a dreamer (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
Confusion and misinformation is the social food that has been fed to young generations for a long time now- inner dissention has peaked and ignorant religious folks have already labeled it, "the plague of apathy". Disconcern for social standards along with subtle rebellion is closer to the truth of this plagues nature; social collapse and redecoration is inevitable- besides, the world is in desperate need for reform on a global scale. Lets pray Gen X doesn't touch up the mask of govermental/political control; lets hope they invent a new mask. Universal Karma in my opinion has ultimately landed in the black scale; greed and materialism satisfy the human need for a false sense of order and control- the illusion of power. Arrogant deviants such as myself take great pleasure in being apart of this chaos; this fusion of energy in corroding stability- Thats what makes me one of few ultimate rogues, despite the many that feel that me and others alike are simply dope motivated gothic dullards- judgement is ignorance. But change comes slow; I see the world crawling like a snail with corrosive sludge marking alterations made and current destination.

Up the ladder: black
Down the ladder: Dear George Bush

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Weighted score: 4.5517645
Overall Rank: 12641
Posted: April 21, 2004 3:18 AM PDT; Last modified: April 21, 2004 3:18 AM PDT
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[2] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 21-Apr-04/3:38 AM | Reply
And just when you think a cock couldn't get any bigger along comes someone with a Swedish vacum pump.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 21-Apr-04/5:33 AM | Reply
So apart from spazzing out on meth-beakers and party-whazzes every tooby beeper, and writing poetry about how deviant you are, what do you actually do that's so fucking deviant? Nothing. You've just got an obsession with being different from other people, because it's the only way you can excuse your astounding mediocrity in all areas.
What a prime bollock:

"[Surrealist Dark Poet] A young man of eighteen, living in San Jose, California who has posted on poemranker & ezboard poetry forums under his primary penname SupremeDreamer-- other pennames include Sdreamer, DreamerSupreme, Don-Quixote, Y2kSlamPoet, and Shit-Crumpets. Most of his work is written while binging on meth, or in imaginary trances- his style varies, and has been considered dark, humorous, affirmative, philosophical, vulgar and slightly innovative. Well known in some poetry communities as an offensive, up-front asshole comedian, and proud of it."

http://poetry.tetto.org/~SDreamer/
[1] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w @ 195.157.153.253 | 21-Apr-04/5:41 AM | Reply
SEAGOON: I must warn you that this is a case of ipso facto corincarborundum filius.
ECCLES: Ohohoooo. What do all dem woords mean den?
SEAGOON: I don't know, but they make me sound intelligent. In any case, they fooled you.
ECCLES: Oh, yeah well, you needn't have used such long words, small words fool me just the same.
[8] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53 | 21-Apr-04/6:00 AM | Reply
one fix: "plague[']s nature"

I can't help thinking there's a simpler way to say the same thing, but I guess the vocabularic diarrhea, and I mean that in the nicest possible way, is a style - and I really won't fault you for that. I think the thing does encapsulate a complete thought, as well.

I'm forced to consider the merrits of this style, however; it raises questions as I read the piece ... Who is your audience? Is the style consistent with the message? And a broader question: what is the value of language?

See what happens? I completely ignore the message and go right to the method of conveyance.
[2] deleted user @ 67.165.254.252 | 21-Apr-04/1:21 PM | Reply
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