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Ravings of a dreamer (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

Confusion and misinformation is the social food that has been fed to young generations for a long time now- inner dissention has peaked and ignorant religious folks have already labeled it, "the plague of apathy". Disconcern for social standards along with subtle rebellion is closer to the truth of this plagues nature; social collapse and redecoration is inevitable- besides, the world is in desperate need for reform on a global scale. Lets pray Gen X doesn't touch up the mask of govermental/political control; lets hope they invent a new mask. Universal Karma in my opinion has ultimately landed in the black scale; greed and materialism satisfy the human need for a false sense of order and control- the illusion of power. Arrogant deviants such as myself take great pleasure in being apart of this chaos; this fusion of energy in corroding stability- Thats what makes me one of few ultimate rogues, despite the many that feel that me and others alike are simply dope motivated gothic dullards- judgement is ignorance. But change comes slow; I see the world crawling like a snail with corrosive sludge marking alterations made and current destination.

Shuushin 21-Apr-04/6:00 AM
one fix: "plague[']s nature"

I can't help thinking there's a simpler way to say the same thing, but I guess the vocabularic diarrhea, and I mean that in the nicest possible way, is a style - and I really won't fault you for that. I think the thing does encapsulate a complete thought, as well.

I'm forced to consider the merrits of this style, however; it raises questions as I read the piece ... Who is your audience? Is the style consistent with the message? And a broader question: what is the value of language?

See what happens? I completely ignore the message and go right to the method of conveyance.




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